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my husband and his pineapples


When I know you,
I know you like I know
gravity
I know that soil is soil
and sand is yellow
and I know that
you wear white to feel good about
heaven
and blue when
death begins its fall from morning.

I know you like I know a carrot

That carrots are carrots
always
and are orange and scaled
and rooted in the earth

I know you like I know the taste of fruit,
the bitter-sharp cuts of a freshly ripe gooseberry
just like the ones we picked last
summer in the fields
owned by grannies

and I think that I will know you
when we are old
wrinkled and shrivelled like rumpled raisins and
laughing at
the botched pineapple-turnover
- I will remember
knowing you like I do now
ripe and sweet and always
totally lovely

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I did read the rules,

this one is for/about the man I am going to marry next week

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  • CoundessaScarlotti
    1 day ago
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    Uh... I really think this would be a memorable wedding vow. Facinating and heart-felt. It's really sweet and funny, just like it sounds.

  • ESuivrai
    November 10

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    oh emm! i love this one! its so sweet. we can tell you are about to be married!
    love the bit about carrots, and rooted in the earth. great imager, especially for you and D... as we discussed "earthy people." haha love it!


  • Amera gold member
    November 9

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    This is wonderfully captivating. I am so happy for you and everything you say in this poem is right. I am an old married lady coming up on my six month anniversary so I have plenty of experience and I can tell you that my husband’s pineapples never grow old.

    Love,
    Amera


  • Snowtiger
    November 9

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    God bless you on a poignant piece of writing and the joys to come for you. I wish I was this articulate prior to my own marriage, rather than simply babbling and smiling dumbly....

    The last stanza is wonderful and holds up on its own as a fragile and sweet piece of writing. Much is said there-- it is a poem full of warmth with an especially warm and cosy ending. Thanks for sharing!

  • luv2dream gold member
    November 6

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    this is so lovely! "I know you like I know the taste of fruit" this reminded me when i picked blueberries and raspberries with my b/f and ate them from the trail we walked on close to where he lives ( he's about 600+ miles from me). I also loved the last part. "and I think that I will know you
    when we are old
    wrinkled and shrivelled like rumpled raisins and
    laughing at
    the botched pineapple-turnover " i find myself looking at elderly people and appreciate the wrinkles they have and the closeness I see with their partners they are with. They still see the beauty in each other. This poem is so beautiful!
    have fun at the wedding and especially enjoy each moment you have together.


  • arafura gold member
    November 5
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    You got it bad poet! Very romantic!


  • Acqua Mossa
    November 5
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    i love this


  • Ellegirl silver member
    November 5

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    This poem is really special because you are entering a special time in your life and this
    write reflexes it! Continue to nurture that love and it will continue to grow always!


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    November 5
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    you never fail to bring food into the equation, eh? lol
    beautiful poem.


  • Budart
    November 5

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    Love and food, eating, feeding, and being fed have always been wrapped up in a ball for me so I relate to this poem quite strongly. Thanks.


  • VampireKitty-
    November 5

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    This was a greta poem thank you and congrats and getting married hope you very happy i send you my best wishes for you both...good luck in the contest

  • Rowan gold member
    November 5
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    I hope you always remember the laughter hon...
    this is definitely a love poem.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 5
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    This would be very sweet and wonderful.
    Joe


  • Allyce May gold member
    November 5

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    Next week! You must be so excited! Ohhh, I am excited for you too and that food, nom nom nommmmm, lol. Not only is this a beautiful poem, but it makes me hungry! I love the idea of knowing someone like you know basic and unquestionable things in life; things that have been constant for decades. Awwww!

    I have a memory like a sieve, so I will tell you now: have the greatest day of your life and I wish you lots of laughter and light and flowers and bubbles and sunshine for your future

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    November 5
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    very well done luv ... it reminds me that maybe love still exists out there ... somewhere ...


  • chilali
    November 5

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    wow. so beautiful. i absolutely love this. i love your poetry! i cannot even chose the right words to say as to how your poetry makes me feel when i read it, so simlple and so .haha. i dont know. orgasmic! lol. like seriously. you are amazing! and i woke the wedding plans are going well!

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