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First Flight





released
freedom to fly
red and gold shadow wings
to dance on autumn's feisty winds
leaves fall.



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Artwork: http://d200fahol9mbkt.cloudfront.net/item/357461/Falling_leaves.jpg

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 7

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    You know me and Autumn ... I feel that I can't say enough in a cinquain but you managed beautifully.

    Sue


  • azure85 gold member
    November 7

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    You can see the leaves falling between the breeze, and their colors are vibrant in your lines. A good cinquain about the season, thank you so much.

  • Purrsanthema
    November 5

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    Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Best luck in the contest!