Yes, I confess,
it's our secret ambition
to rectify this rendition
of lust over love.
We release our lungs
like puffing engines
that fuel the moaning curves
in the midst of our creation.
Like torrents of pulses
we drip of damnation,
so deliciously
reeking in this decadent sin.
So to hell with heaven
if they won't let us in.
Author notes
Prompt: All I Want Is You, U2
A contest entry
- All I Want Is You ... by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended November 15, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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To hell with them indeed! This is rich with deep longing... and an almost lyrical feel to it. Excellent!
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2nd stanza
what metaphor 
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its so good to read from you again! excellent and rich in metaphors.... love the last two lines ken!
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Hmmmm, I like this.
(after your explaination of course)
I rarely see you do metaphor lately but you did it amazingly here. It's kind of different from your usual writes but not less well written.
I missed reading for you so it's a very pleasant thing to find a new write from you today.
Keep it up, Ken-Chan!
Love
~Noor
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I like that "Ken-Chan" lol
so shaweeet, and a surprise you know Japanese too
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haha. i love this. like totally. and i so understand it completely. lol. last two lines- killer! good luck in the contest. this is gold for sure
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oh wow! Just awesome. Nope no ariters block here that I can see. Brilliant! best wishes in the contest
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Lol...This song has always been one of my favorites by Bono and the boys, you have found a way to see a little more tongue in cheek...doesn't seem like you have writer's block anymore C
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