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Sunrise, Sunset

Sunrise, sunset,

Sunrise, sunset

Quickly, quickly

flow the days,

Newborns quickly grow into toddlers,

Blossoming children as they play.

 

 

 

Sunrise, sunset,

Sunrise, sunset.

Quickly, quickly

sigh, the days!

Little princess becomes a young lady

Waving as she drives away

 

 

 

Sunrise, sunset

Sunrise, sunset,

Quickly, quickly

flow our days

First love has flown away in memories

Now, our hair has turned into gray.

 

 

 

Sunrise, sunset,

Sunrise, sunset

slowly, slowly

flow our days

Love awakens as a rosebud

Never, never will pass away.

Author notes

A friend made a comment with "Fiddler On The Roof" rhyme, and I so fondly remember that musical....and with it on my mind, I experimented a little with the rhyme and song to pen this...It may be just the beginning ...I may add to it..

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  • crivanea silver member
    November 12
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    ohh cute i like it...i can hum to this i love sunrise and sunset..but lately the seattle sky has presented me with only cloudy forecast wonderfully done


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 11

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    Loved the musical and the story it shares - liked this take on the lyrics - filled with images and sentiments that are easy to read and understand. Nicely written.


  • penman gold member
    November 7
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    Wow

    What a great take on the lyrics to the song. And so very creative. Best of luck in the contest


  • The Drifter
    November 6

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    A beautiful poem about the passage of time and what it brings. Very well done and that intices the reader along with its sweet flow. It was a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing your poetic wisdom.

  • drapedindarkness
    November 6

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    Sweet indeed

    Such sweet words impress me
    And the images make me smile
    Adding would be wonderful
    Checking every once a while

    We all need constant cheering
    And your words do you proud
    Feel the prose within you
    And do as is allowed

  • goalsv
    November 5
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    Hope you do add to it, it is great, I love the flow and rhyme and the meaning. Talent shines as usual.

  • sleepinglion
    November 5
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    This is a beautiful song Sis, and you have done it proud
    Love David


  • who iam
    November 5

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    It has a nice flow with the motion of the sunrise and sunset.

    The growth of our loved ones are like those of so many sunrise,sunsets
    with such ever changing days we grow old, but the memories stay young in our hearts and minds even if -"Now, our hair has turned into gray."

    Well said my friend.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    November 5

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    Sublimely composed...


    Lovely... "Sunrise, Sunset" sings the magic of living... A beautiful poem.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5

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    I love the style and form used
    Lyrical poetry flows
    and the image you have given me in my mind tells of how we all grow to age to be someone and look back to those treasured memories

    Much love sis

    Julie xx


  • Xianaria gold member
    November 5
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    This rings like a beautiful melody, a lovely piece and a pleasure to read.
    Thank you for sharing!

    ~ Tim

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