Unknowing this moment, to us all we are blind
moving through life so swiftly entwined,
though to most this outcome would gladly decline
deaths sweet embrace the untimely demise.
Rules set in motion past ages ago
a life isn’t long will never move slow,
live life to the fullest, try not to feel low
fly in the breeze with a feathered flow.
Time moves so fast its hard to hold on
if hesitant not careful your life will be gone,
so writhe like a serpent or swim like a swan
don’t daydream your life to days of foregone.
To all death will meet us and to the one this is true
don’t try to interpret understand or construe,
we will never know for it comes out of the blue
the one appointment we keep oh for me and yes you…
Author notes
J a y d e 1
Death, the one appointment we all must keep, and for which no time is set - Charlie Chan
not done a rhyme poem in ages...thought i'd give it a go for this contest...
A contest entry
- Picture, Word Bank, Quote OH MY!: Pick a Prompt for a Dark Write! by Concrete Angel.
1050 points, ended November 20, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Going for the Gold (PWs ONLY) by Intricate Wordsmith.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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And the truth was never so hard to accept, death do us all....
Excellent poem Jayde, I really liked how this flowed and the way it rhymed.
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"...so writhe like a serpent or swim like a swan..."
As clever, or more than Charlie Chan, you filled this
piece with rhythmic rhyme and pointed advice.
You and ryhme on very friendly terms!
M-C
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Great take on the Chan prompt. This flowed effortlessly from beginning to end. Life is to short to be wasted on insipid attitudes and behaviors, thank you for the reminder that we all should enjoy each moment that we are alive as it very well may be our last one. Good luck in the contest.
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Oh yeah! Fantastic take on the prompt! I'm very glad that you gave rhyming a go for this contest
I think it worked well with what you had to say. I think there's a great message conveyed in your words that we never know when death is coming so we need to live it up while we can! This one really gets the gears turnin' I really like that! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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you are right dear one for it is inevitably.. nothing we can change or do.. this is stunning hun you insight and the depth of you poem are amazing .. I love your mindset so weel said and penned...Hugs Always Angel♥
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this poem flows great,i love the last stanza,very well written,wow,best of luck in the contest
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Great work. Nice rhyming and flow, but more importantly, great message. No once can escape it, lol.
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You have penned a gem here
love these lines...
Rules set in motion past ages ago
a life isn’t long will never move slow,
live life to the fullest, try not to feel low
fly in the breeze with a feathered flow.
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Great take on the quote prompt I really envy your ability to rhyme coz I suck at it lol
You have some wonderful imagery in this poem and the last lines were great
we will never know for it comes out of the blue
the one appointment we keep oh for me and yes you…
Best of luck in the contest
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Oh dear this is beautiful
It really is amating how you talk about what so many fear
Death comes truely too often way to soon
Someone I knew died with 39 when he was about to have everythiing he was looking so long for
The only thing that made me feel a bit better back then was somene that told me that my friend had feared life much more than death
Greatky done here
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