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the frozen heart

stonewalled heart in a blizzard's storm
the hard chill ice became its norm
it just forgot the long past warm
and froze itself
trapped inside its shell
trapped in self made hell

the tears the lonely heart let fall
ran fast down cracks throughout the wall
and froze; growing from crack, to hall
breaks ragged show a tale
her lonely faith would fail
against her walls she railed

draped 'round this lonely heart, key lies
so blinded by nearsighted tears cried
forgot her rescue, sorrowful, wild
and her key wept
it had been left
useless, bereft

and now her cracked and ravaged heart
contains no joy, no smiles, no part
of her was left with light or art
and so her key
ran here, to me
we came to her and saved her
see?

Author notes

For my dear friend... You have hope. There will always be pain, but pain has only so much power over you before hope makes its way to your side. And when hope gets there I will have been there, holding your hand, or even just pushing you around Wal-Mart in a shopping cart with an elf hat on your head and a smile on your face. I love you girl. Everything is going to be okay.

From my heart to your eyes

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    November 5

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    and now her cracked and ravaged heart
    contains no joy, no smiles, no part
    of her was left with light or art
    and so her key
    ran here, to me
    we came to her and saved her
    see?

    I really loved this stanza. It was a terrific way to end this. You did such a great job with it. Keep on writing and good luck in all you do!

  • thedaveformula
    November 5

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    quality

    runs very well and intices the reader into wanting to know more, keeps me reading right till the end. effortless flow, you've also avoided the rhyming becoming repetitive in quite a cunning way. nicely done.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 5

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    Kelly
    This is brilliant, poignant and uplifting in the end..writing for a dear friend can often sprake a writer to a new level..you my dear have just reached that new level..in my opinion, this is your best write of late..you improve more and more everytime I visit you..this piece brought forth many emotions in my mind..splendid rhyme and flow..Write On! ..love & light David

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