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Barney and Friends

Is there anything sadder
than a rag; chopped, scissored
or torn,  from something
they used to wear
and couldn't part with
till it was so thin, we could see
it was time to steal it
and say
it must have been stolen.

Is there
anything worse, than lying to eyes
made of candy and shine
that you were the butcher
of blankies;

Barney, Cinderella, and Superman
jammies? Then, top it off
with my Mother Superior mentality
and scoff
at my friends
taking cartoons and making

the homeless a quilt

as I smile and clean

fucking windows

for everyone else

but never for them

never for me, and all

their childhood heroes

draping my tap.

 

 

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  • Balldinger silver member
    November 6

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    chain dipped and florinated - my teeth feel cleaner having read this and wistfully passing into the unknown realm of butchered blankies...


  • george the 23rd
    November 5

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    I was expecting something completely different based on the title... Truthfully, I looked at it and shuddered! But you took this somewhere incredible. Your words seem quite effortless, and perfectly arranged. Very well done, this.


  • jazzcat gold member
    November 5

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    Amazing. I mean, how you take a subject like "blankies" and kids pj's and turn it into a story with depth, style and emotion is beyond me. It took me back to when I found my mom cleaning the stove with my old teddy-bear pjs. I was mortified! Thanks for making me relive that! Seriously though, your work comes across so well and speaks to many of your readers with great clarity and substance. You're a great story-teller.


  • Malabu
    November 5

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    I was told of witches like you....somehow that blankie I would not let anyone take from me...was never cleaned nor allowed to let anyone remove it from my clutches..
    where were you?
    the night it went missing...i cried and cried...
    so I was told


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 5
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    You are cold hearted towards cartoons, but i loves you anyway.
    I love how you write life into words.

    Joe


  • ccawley gold member
    November 4

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    "all their childhood heroes draping my lap" love that, especially the verb "draping"...very fresh and strong.
    My babies are all grown up. I miss those days!
    Nice poem...I hear ya!


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 4

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    Oh you thief, you butcher of blankies! You made me see those eyes too, so trusting, and how they stab right through you - yet soft rags do make the windows shine (as I remember, it's ages since I cleaned any, and never have in two years here.)

    Made me think of the crocheted rugs my mother made from patiently unravelled sweaters - everything in our house was handed down and really worn out! but she'd find enough good wool to make rugs for the next generation, in rainbow-coloured squares.


  • Cannonsfire
    November 4

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    Making a quilt? Wow I didn't know you could quilt...I am always impressed with people who can sew lol I struggle to darn a sock and usually go buy new ones. C

    • Rowan gold member
      November 4
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      hon...
      you didn't read it quite right, I could sew if my life depended on it, but I live in community of beautiful, beautiful quilts, and quilters. lol. I'm kinda surprised you missed that hon. winks, as she glues the hem of her jeans.
      Still love ya
      K.

      • just mercedes gold member
        November 4
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        lol! I've super-glued buttons on that outlasted the garment.

        • Cup-a-Joe
          November 5
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          Mercedes,

          Thanks for that tip. I had never thought of it.

          Joe


      • Cannonsfire
        November 4
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        sheesh now I read it again I see lol it's the late nights this week lol I am square eyed

    • Rowan gold member
      November 4
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      How could've you possibly read it I was still adjusting the colour? lol

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