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Nowhere, Michigan




Redneck wedding,
with pig-roast to follow.

R.S.V.P. should be sent
to middle of nowhere,
Michigan;

don't forget the cake.

My lungs are angry,
and I just stabbed the damn cake
with the spatula I use to ice it;

it was bulging, un-even,
and pissing me off.

I keep blowing my nose, washing
hands throbbing from the squeeze
of piping bags,

and now I've got a cough
to go with that cake.

Two more days to complete
a four tier ticking me off center-piece
that will get sliced, eaten,
and forgotten;

as will the fact that I made it
for free, and sick as a dog.



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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 25
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    It's a drag to be sick especially when you are at work.
    Sorry that you are under the weather at the moment,
    and I hope that you feel better very soon! Thanks for
    this wonderful entry here, I really appreciate it!
    I wish you all the best in my contest!




    Jeremy0826


  • Not-The-Sun silver member
    November 10

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    Two more days to complete
    a four tier ticking me off center-piece
    that will get sliced, eaten,
    and forgotten;

    love this poem, so honest and the ending made me chuckle, hope you feel better though! >.<


  • crivanea silver member
    November 5

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    don't take your anger out on the cake!!! hope things are well with you

  • Rowan gold member
    November 5

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    you're a better person than me. lol.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 5

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    Awwwww
    You need a BUNCH of huggers!
    I hope you feel better soon, hon and best of luck in this contest!


  • ccawley gold member
    November 4

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    This was entertaining


  • Cannonsfire
    November 4
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    Damn icing! I am sure it will be perfect hun C

    • I am so SICK! My tummy feels UCKY! Make me better! LOL


      • Cannonsfire
        November 4

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        Awww I wish I could hun, damn winter/fall flu bugs are the pits...sending lots of good thoughts your way


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 4

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    My lungs are angry,
    and I just stabbed the damn cake
    with the spatula I use to ice it;

    This is SO cool! I really love your tone!

    Good luck!!

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