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Turn

I turn my head around the thoughts
the memories
the friendship that you couldn't tell there ever was
the silence between us
the akwardness

i cant help but get trapped under it all
as if all the tears ive shed have frozen over
like a wintery pond
and i just happened to fall through



is it really horrid?

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  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    November 8

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    Always a pain in the kiester when you find a fake friend. You have no idea what happened but, there it is, like you dropped off the face of the planet.
    Never very much fun,
    Peace


    • Mrs.Shadow
      November 20
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      thanks for the comment and the relation. i love how you always leave in depth comments and are not afraid to speak your thoughts


  • kiwibird
    November 4

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    I definitely get the feeling of abruptness in the poem, especially in the last line, saying that you didn't know that your friendship was going to end. I like the simile a lot--maybe add one in the first stanza?


    • Mrs.Shadow
      November 20
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      i was thinking the same thing only i couldnt come up with it, minimal writers block


  • Rayray
    November 4
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    That was cool

    I really liked this!a lot! I definitely know the feeling - you expressed yourself very well - kootos


    • Mrs.Shadow
      November 20
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      thanks i really appreciate you reading. im glad you could relate and you liked it

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