Where do I go from here?
There is no escape.
She has her strong claws wrapped around me
I am hers to take.
The noose she has on my mind
Is ever so slowly, but surely tightening
Molding my one familiar fragile innocent mind
into a mutinous stranger belonging to Ana
I look into her world
The mirror on my wall
I see her there behind me
Standing Tall, but her face is cold, apalled
No matter how little
It’s always to much
Punishment is necessary
The fat must come off
Her whispers in my ear
Yes, the ones only I hear
She whispers her instructions followed by sweet lies
And stupid me with out a thought, always listens and complies
Why don’t I fight her?
Why am I so weak?
I try to see through her
But it seems to be the truth she speaks
Author notes
This is the first thing I'v written in a very long time. I know its not very good, and i just kind of wrote and created this.
How can it be better?
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it is good
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Welcome to AllPoetry!!!
I have a totally different story with an Anna, but we'll leave the past there...this is very well written!
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Blessed Be,
Jeremy
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I actually really liked this, despite you saying it's not very good.
I know exactly what you mean here, totally and completely. I think I would put these lines
"She whispers her instructions followed by sweet lies
And stupid me with out a thought, always listens and complies"
like this:
"She whispers her instructions,
followed by sweet lies,
And stupid me with out a thought,
always listens and complies"
and make a new verse from them - just to keep the flow a little more. But I mean, that's just layout really rather than any change. I really like what you've already got here - I think it sums up the complex emotions behind an ED really well. It's good to just write & express what you really feel sometimes, and I feel that's what you've done here. xox
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