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beneath this house






Lights left on
you (ran and) hid where
not even the crows
could find your body.

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  • Nick Tashiro
    November 18

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    Glorious. This is like a little burp of life, very WCW. There's this delicate, meditative, yet matter-of-fact approach to the death here--if I'm reading this right--that reminds me of the last line of "The Death of the Ball Turret Gunner."


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    November 7

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    very spooky and eerie!! I like it. You can really pack a punch with just a few words. Great job poet!! Good luck with the contest.
    peace and light, Kp