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Her viridian eyes

 

Like banded jasper, they're
an aerial view of rural living.
The shells of painted turtles.

Wreathes of celadon, evergreen
and spearmint. You can walk
through them in bare feet. Hear

the hum of a rainforest; lemurs,
frogs and parrots sleep in the

shade - sea pottery smooth.

Pthalo of Tinkerbell’s linen.
Asparagus tips and lyrics to
Boulevard of Broken Dreams
with a glaze of part sun,
part ocean.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Grunts Girl silver member
    November 25
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    i loved the mix of it all...
    i stayed at the use of asparagus... i love asparagus but find it stinky to cook and gives me horrible breath...
    so within this- the spearmint and evergreens...
    then the asparagus...

    this is more than being about foods and smells...
    not sure but to me it tasted a little bitter at the end

    beautiful but made me sad...
    like shattered pottery once whole now used in mosiac


    • tara wilson gold member
      2 days ago
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      Thanks Heidi,
      I think you used a microscope to read this poem!

      Welcome back, it's nice to hear from you, I'm not around much these days but have just finished a poem for your 'window' contest - thank you for the inspiration.


  • girl shaman
    November 20
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    so sweet! its almost like a fairytale of words with all this light and magic happening all at once! i love it


  • Kiran silver member
    November 20
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    A very serene feel to this piece, I loved it. The imagery is outstanding! Brililant


  • cubert
    November 16
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    How yummy... just gonna linger there awhile


  • tjayrush gold member
    November 14

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    Wonderful. Just for my info I looked up 'jasper'. Its a gemstone and the diminutive form of an enlgish name Gasper but it also has a biblical reference 'a gem of various colours, one of the twelve inserted in the high priest's breast-plate' which I think hits dead on the turtle's shell. What a perfect word choice.

    Also I see at least three references to pottery working, so I bet you either have been, are, or are hoping to become a potter, which is just a really cool thing to include. I'll have to remember to draw from more sources when I write.

    I have a hard time even understanding a peom this well done let alone ever hoping to write this well. Excellent.

  • seascout
    November 14
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    very descriptive piece, so revealing are her eyes


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 12

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    Wow, a veritable sensory smorgasbord with all the right words placed in all the right places.

    Your command syntax like a master conductor controls an orchestra.


    mj.


  • Aribeth
    November 12

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    A lovely little read

    A lovely pic too

  • reginatotheb
    November 12

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    The use of shaded color creates a vivid image to your tranquil words. I enjoyed reading this.

  • Ouranos
    November 11

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    Nothing I could say would do justice to this

    Awesome?

    Ridiculously overused.

    Fantastic?

    Entirely too tame.

    Outstanding?

    Falls way short of the mark.

    But I had to write something so I could give you your well-earned applause.

    P.S.

    After reading this, I have no illusion that I'm anything more than a dilettante.

    You, on the other hand, are a poet. Of that there is absolutely no doubt.


  • Daizee silver member
    November 11

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    Fresh seems like such a boring word to describe this after all the gorgeous descriptions you've used . This really lingers in the readers minds. It made me want to read it several times and absorb each feeling.


  • Allyce May gold member
    November 11

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    Somehow missed this - lucky I saw it spotlighted! It is most beautiful, like its writer I love the word "viridian" and you've followed through perfectly. Such unique, thoughtful and vibrant descriptions Makes me want to write and never write again all at the same time, lol. You are amazing!


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 11

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    to use a word my friend Mairi uses...och!
    This is pure beauty and so very much you.
    xoxo L

  • heylookaneuphemism
    November 10
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    Your voice is outragous beautiful!


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 10

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    a small poem filled with images of an almost tactile quality, leaves the reader with a sense of having seen touched and been touched by things, aromas...sense impressions from these words...very nicely done...PK

  • Virgoan
    November 10

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    I can feel the skin of the rainforest here and the brushing of its hair. I felt this when I was in Palawan - the feeling of reflection, the autumn in one's self.

    There is much more here that needs deeper diving as it is hidden within the words.

    As always, a beautiful poem by a beautiful person.


    Thanks for sharing.


  • The Rivaling Mimic
    November 9

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    This is easy to appreciate for it's writ truthfully and I adore how beautiful you flow. A treat for sure.

    The Rivaling Mimic


  • CaliOkie silver member
    November 9

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    This is beautiful . . . it puts me in mind of the clear waters of the tropics; iridescent like peacock feathers. You also incorporate sound, scent, and texture into this poem and you do it all with a gentle, lilting voice and I find myself feeling the cool of a northwestern forest.

    In contrast to your words, you created a periwinkle background . . . a fact that does not go unnoticed . . . at least at some deep level.

    This is excellent. Thoughts of it will sooth my day.

    Garrison


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    November 8

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    An amazing description. Well penned.


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 7

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    this is beautiful...a jewel of a poem! simply love the images you've painted in my mind with such a soft and glowing touch

    ~ Nicolette


  • Nevel
    November 7

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    It reads like a journey...through consciousness..I like the sudden, surprised "jumps" in your poem...wonderful imagery.."sea pottery smooth" great ...your last lines are really breathtaking...very rich worded...I got a piece of greenish jasper, quiet rare, same as the way you write, very unique...
    Erwin


  • NurseChilly gold member
    November 7

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    i have some pieces of jasper in my trinket dish with other crystals and objects to play with... they all mean something precious, as do these words..
    lovely lovely piece
    well done
    G.xx


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 6

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    Exquisite softness and sensual imagery are woven in your words - hyperbole at it summit.

    All the best in the contest.

    Sue


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 6

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    you have capture a essence of beauty Tara,
    such Imagery penned with Doves feathers whisper in the wind,
    just magical ss

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • manatee
    November 5
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    This is really something. Hyperpoetic. Good luck.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 5

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    Pure poetry dearest Poetess...Her viridian eyes is written with a glorious embrace of language...the imagery is somewhere the reader welcomes becoming lost in whilst experiencing a joy at being found. These eyes that have realized the lyrics of boulevards with broken dreams hold dearly the warm rays, warmer days, wistful bliss of movement, no, not exactly, rather of being safe to move and to be moved perhaps...


    Absolutely achingly beautiful


    Kudos


    and such a pleasure to read your pearled penmanship again







  • Terry Collett
    November 5
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    Excellent poem, I think. Enjoyed.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 5

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    can't really put in words what i think cause at this point i don't know, kind of dumbfounded. but that painting your words painted in my mind, beautiful. keep it flowing


  • e s h a.
    November 5
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    lovely..


  • Malabu
    November 5

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    I sort of got hungry reading this...and felt a little warm glow in this magical place you have taken me...how sweetly the willow sways to your song

    breathtaking!

    mal


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 5

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    pretty

    very pretty..reading this makes me feel dreamy..outstanding my friend..


  • Garmond gold member
    November 5

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    Gobsmacked!

    Only a true poet can see this way... think this way... WRITE this way.

    I am in awe of this one Tara, truly exceptional.

    Take a bow as I tip my hat to you.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 5

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    If I had to choose one poem for the poem of the year, this would be it.
    I love every word, so i cant pick out my favorite part.
    It's just so "Homegrown"
    Your imagery is always so refreshing, and the subject matter is just so
    Tara. lol
    Bookmarked, for sure.

    Joe


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 4

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    Oh my dear poet...Your words of color..(as an artist I know them) This made the piece with your imagery so effective and awesome! Wish I was there...I wish you well in the contest...I have no doubt you will do excellently!


  • Cannonsfire
    November 4
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    Beautiful C


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 4

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    Stunning imagery that tells a story so casually - great work!


  • jantastic gold member
    November 4
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  • Rowan gold member
    November 4

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    shite...
    wish I had eyes like that. Stunning tara
    absolute.


  • ccawley gold member
    November 4

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    This is amazing...I don't know what to say.
    Thank you


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 4

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    I love eyes

    I could fall into a girls beautiful eyes and bathe for a week

    Your poem is a sigh

    Love it

    Jeff


  • Randomly Beautiful
    November 4

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    You are amazing. I love the beauty in every piece you pen. Was so happy to see a post from you. There are no suggestions, as usual, because you are stunning love.

  • LovingPhoenix
    November 4

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    I found myself hypnotized by your words. Such vivid description. I loved every word! Good luck in the contest!


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 4

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    There are cups of coffee seem so special at times.
    But yours has Kahlua, rich cream and the hint
    of ancient smells vaporizing in magic odors
    that invite the tastes to tantalization.

    On the veranda of your words I eat butter toast
    and signal the waiter for as much more of your
    poetry as I can stuff into my head on my budget.

    michael


  • JinSays gold member
    November 4

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    just wow.


    wow.

    love,
    jin


  • arafura gold member
    November 4

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    Wow... I'd like to stare into those eyes! Magical work poet. You always transport me 'somewhere' else. I love your mind!


  • katelynmcdougall
    November 4

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    This is perhaps one of the most beautiful descriptive poems I have ever read. Seriously, this is beyond beautiful. Every single word holds so much magic and life. It took my a few reads to even begin to let it all sink in.

    Secretly I wish you were a man writing this poem to me... *sigh* because my heart would be swept away. I am head over heals in love with this poem.

    I am in fact, 100% jealous that I could not, or at least did not write this poem. That makes me so happy, because I think the only appropriate time for me to be jealous is in a situation like this. It means I have read something that has really touched me.

    If anything, I'd say it has opened my eyes. I feel forever changed, for now I will forever be trying to come up with such wonderful words to describe any eyes that meet mine.

    Thank you so much for this wonderful poem

  • Topnotchsy
    November 4

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    Beautiful imagery here. I had to check up the word viridian, only to discover it as the best word I've found to explain my eye color


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 4

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    Oh my goodness... this is just gorgeous! It has an almost mystical feel to it... and reminds me of some epic storytelling... I think I could have read more and more of this... it is almost like a whole book, summarized in a short verse!

    Absolutely stunning writing here... I'm in awe!


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