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Words Spoken Live Forever

Too often words are like
the beginning of a rainbow,
beautiful and soft;
yet end up like the darkness
of approaching storm clouds,

disguised...

Deception comes in many flavors,
yet the taste never changes;
unable to swallow
or consume

by another...

Words spoken live forever,
not to be removed by ones self,
only by the forgiving hand
of their intention

and so I humbly ask...



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  • Denise 28
    November 23
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    I agree word can cause pain or pleasure. Your discription of the effects of how they are use is soft gentle and easy. Like being cradled in ones hands or arms.Well written.


  • SheWolfNLust silver member
    November 22
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    beautifully writen and I love the message within,I very much enjoyed your poem, it was most certainly a pleasure to read,

    I so love these stanzas and felt they were awesome

    Deception comes in many flavors,
    yet the taste never changes;
    unable to swallow
    or consume

    by another...

    Words spoken live forever,
    not to be removed by ones self,
    only by the forgiving hand
    of their intention

    and so I humbly ask...

    simply beautiful


  • amnouup
    November 9
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    Great!

    Great message here with very nice metaphor, really appreciate this :-)


  • CaptainObvious gold member
    November 8

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    Deception comes in many flavors,
    yet the taste never changes;

    Beautifully worded and oh so true. I like your message here. The whole poem is great really. Thanks for the read!


  • sinfull
    November 8

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    Words are the most damaging things I have ever known. Also the most wonderful. In some peoples hands they are a lethal weapon. This is an insightful look at the other side of words. well done


  • fiona8 silver member
    November 7
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    The taste of deception is hard to swallow.
    Midnight rainbows difficult to see.

    and so you humbly ask.....


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 7

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    So I humbly ask...So often words from the mouth are the most hurtful when the brain is not engaged in keeping them to ourselves when talking to ones we love. So often we take that person for granted because we are related, or got married or in a serious relationship. We often think that even when times get bad, and we ourselves are the ones causing the problems, that they will stick by us. How sad, when they leave that we are left looking in an empty mirror, seeing our own reflection of just how ashamed of ourselves, that we can't stand to look at the person we became.

    Great poem...says so much! Thank you for sharing!

    ~Sie


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    November 7

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    Caustic. Realistic.

    "Words Spoken Live Forever" brandishes the sword of in justice; a curse of
    egoic treachery out for re venge without a clue on who's who or who's hurting who!

    I know this poem all too well, both as the Curse and the Cursed by the Word!

    These wounds last more than a lifetime and wound more than the original
    wounded.

    "Words Spoken Live Forever" wields a mighty shield: the author asks for pardon!
    A grace that some intellectual giants know not of, nor would think to employ even if...

    I am glad I wondered in Your garden of Humilite and Candor.


    With gratitude and honor for the ability to ask...

    stay
    for ever
    liquid

  • Brook-1 gold member
    November 6
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    Sometimes words can never be forgotten or forgiven. This is so true. Thank you for the nice and deep poem.
    Brook


  • LadyLavender gold member
    November 6

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    John this is so deep and true. Truly an eloquent write with subtle inuances. For now this is my favorite write by you.

    "Deception comes in many flavors,
    yet the taste never changes;
    unable to swallow
    or consume"



    Excellent!

  • luv2dream gold member
    November 6

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    i liked how you left it "and so I humbly ask..." to make us ponder... i love poems that make me think a lot.


  • awannabepoet
    November 5

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    Seems like words are all we have John, once we release them they take on a life of thier own as you so well know.


  • just2write silver member
    November 5

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    I was really struck by the beauty of the first verse. It conjured such a vivid picture in my mind. So true - Words once spoken can linger forever. I good reason to choose them wisely. They can build up, or they can tear down. Too often it is the latter. I was impressed with your ending... it left us wondering what those words would be. Great suspense - and we'll never know the answer. (

  • Synchronicity gold member
    November 4

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    This is a strong premise, "words spoken live forever". I liked where you went with "beginning of a rainbow, beautiful and soft", for spoken words are so often like that in the beginning of a relationship. The transitions in the poem to "storm clouds", "disguised", "deception", and then to "forgiving" are quite relatable. You presented the power of spoken words here vividly, and in the end there is much tenderness in your three dots...


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    November 4

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    a beautiful pen and heart for each words tells the felling penned so well I love these lines..only by the forgiving hand
    of their intention

    and so I humbly ask...


    speak volumes hun... hugs always Angel♥

  • Annorlunda
    November 4

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    Very nicely written. The structure helped the fluency and there were some lovely lines like:

    'Deception comes in many flavors,
    yet the taste never changes;'

    Which was absolutely spot on.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 4

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    A fine sharing this is, my friend
    It seems as though you poured your heart into this write
    Wishing you the best of all there is,
    Sandy


  • findingurself.less gold member
    November 4

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    Well, whoever you lied to, you are sure to be forgiven, if you share this beautiful write with them. This is felt in the heart. Love it!

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