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you left me tapping 'Taps' on my heart.

 

 

I would brush you in opiate chords of dawn's early light; and harmonize hymns on a holy harpsichord, if it would make even a fraction of an iota of a shift in your tectonic plates.


You are steadfast, a mourning morning without traces of gold ink in the rising sun. You are the clouds of fog rolling over no-man's-land, illuminating the barbed wire and forgotten soldiers of your consciousness, raising banners of snowy patriotic obliteration over your crevasses. Have you so quickly forgotten the warmth of tangled feet and twisted bedsheets; or do you seek to replace it with the iron heat of a breathing machine gun? 

 

--x*x-- 

I shine for you, a broken Polaris running out of heat; as the hot gas in my lungs has been exhausted, massaging broken eardrums that beat for Old Glory, but no longer for me.


I will always be here, but I feel my bonds splitting. You said I was a supernova; soon I will be a black hole.

Author notes

http://nerdynotdirty.deviantart.com/art/Writer-s-Block-III-128872023

 

 

This isn't the same picture as the prompt, but it is extremely similar; and it has the typewriter. I also believe that this poem captures a great deal of the setting in the original prompt. 

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  • JinSays gold member
    2 days ago
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    oh, I like it.
    yes, I like this person's art, even though I've only seen a few of these images.
    I love the lighting most of all, but the feeling in these pics is good. Goes further than just a pretty picture. You've dne a fantastic job with the prompt, and I thank you for taking the time to enter. Your writing is superb, but I guess you know that huh?

    Love,
    jin


  • poetryality silver member
    November 10

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    Your poem has a flavor that melts with sweetness on the tongue. This is exquisite work poet! You have captured the prompt picture with great essence. There is love chalked throughout this wondrous work. Beautiful! I wish you the very best in this contest. I felt as if you were speaking directly to me and this entire work ended me in a joyful sigh.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    November 9
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    The ending is strong!

  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    November 9

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    mourning morning



    I always wanted to write those words together but I never had the courage.

    Poetry really is art, I love how the background synchronizes with the picture, which is lovely in itself

    Great poem, and the imagery is fantastic.

    Thanks for entering

    - Blue beaut


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 4
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    beautiful work

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