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slugging out.

slime and slither
of soothing stir
reaps saliva

from sacred
mouths of yearning
mounch.

fork and spoon
invasions
slaughter homes

and feed those
hungry
for shallow filth

carefully perfected by finger of garlic.

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 16
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    Oohh such a dark and lavishing piece.
    I love your jargon.

    Excellence in brevity.

    Bravo!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • scribbleheart
    November 15

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    some lines are a little bit awkward, for example, "of soothing stir" but overall, i think its a good effort. very quirky. I like it.

    x
    Alyssa

  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 4

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    *reaches into bag*



    .......and.......


    Voila! ---->>> ~escargot