Thoughts and Dreams
Nightmares and Passions
All rolling around in my head.
Flashes of friends
Moments with family
Salty drops that are the tears I shed
Numbers and Letters
Symbols and Signs
Jumbled and joined in little time
Tick of the clock
Whine of the traffic
Life without limits would be so sublime
No order there is to what lies in the minds eye
Though I am fading fast, i don't want to say good-bye
Blinding light I see, an eclipse in my view
The accident? The afterlife? Would it be a different hue?
No longer in light, darkness has settled now
Gone from the world, I live in my mind, though i don't know how
Good-bye my friends good-bye my love
Good-bye
A contest entry
- ~Once Upon A Mind~ by OnceUponAMind.
700 points, ended November 8, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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a dark write but i love it...some nice elements to it...and hey thanks for comenting on my write for your contest...I am glad you enjoyed it..what can i say I tried.....lol..........
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The ending is so very sad... and the story is cold. But life can't always be a bundle of flowers.. Can it?
Thank you for entering my contest with your creativity!
Amber
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OMG!
I loved it! The rhythm and rhyme was perfect...To a T! At first I was like what is she talking about but then as I started to get more in depth with the poem, when I actually pictured the events in my head, and felt the sorrow. I was like "WOW" This is a great poem. I especially loved the ending lines "No longer in light, darkness has settled now Gone from the world, I live in my mind, though i don't know how" and the good-bye's. They put a finality to poem, Brought its ending...I don't know what else to say except for thank you for giving me the pleasure of reading this poem!
Smile,
E
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