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Vignettes: Inspired by Rilke

 

 

I. 


Weeping shadows lift branches until they finally bend 

and release their grip on glistening fruit -
they fall - unseen, untasted gestures of a nervous night.

Mournful songs tear at the face of an ancient moon.
We see scars that remain uninterpreted in silence.

There is no light ascending
upon grave-strewn hills as we reach for memory.

Only pebbles rattle slowly beneath ribs of sorrowed mountains
as we scale these cliffs drifting over a shuddering sea.

 



II.


Bitterness becomes unlearned - we find and unveil simple truths
within our surviving songs of strength.

One day, I shall stretch far beyond this limitless sky,
a fiery sunset to be reckoned with.

No more will you hear my voice or read my trembling thoughts -
they will be whispers tossed within the wind,
a rustle of leaves to be forgotten beside your sleepy fire.

Hope was folded and tucked away gently
in the deep drawers of an empty heart, saved for winter's passing rage.

Perhaps you will recall a gentle moment thrust between us -
feather's caress, rather than sword's raging; I wish it to be so.

Let the sky weep, instead,
as we sow these seeds for hopeful harvest to give those in need
the warmth of borrowed sun upon their faces as they dream.

I am here, where you are not - you are there, where I cannot be. 

Let me be lifted towards soothing sky,

elevated from wretched reach of sorrow's shadows.

Let hearts mend minds, minds mend bodies, bodies mend this broken night.

The tender entreaties you've pressed into my hands, my flesh, my bones,
have submitted me into stunned silences, lingering long after the final gasp.

If you listen for the tender entrance of dawn, I will shine for you -
the last star glistening before daybreak, 

a soft murmur as the moon descends.

 

 

 

III.


Lost in the fiery embrace of language, I am
submerged in the music of words, my heart swirling
with infinite color and sound.

Poetry does not look deeply into my eyes,
then lie to me. It has never betrayed my trust
or left me alone in the night, afraid. It will never perish,
leaving me breathless and aching for its touch.

It wraps itself around me, a blanket I can rely on in the coldest storm, 

a hearth I can recline by, understanding its eternal warmth.

It kisses my mouth with spring
when autumn strips the landscape bare of fluttering leaves.
It holds my hand when grief grows too thick with thorns,
brambles around my shuddering bones and brings me nourishment
when I am pale and worn. I am found within its arms, content.

 

 


IV.

I am but an illusion, a wisp of smoke drifting on a wild wind,
ethereal and impermanent.

I am nothing like you might imagine,
no wings or halo to adorn my fragile flesh - the only strength I hold
is within my whispered words - yet, they are not mine to claim.

 

 

 

V.

Upon an ancient tide,
poetry drifted into this realm, 

breathing calm light into sullen eyes, 

beyond the edges of the sky, to fall softly like summer rain.

Cup your hands and feel the wild water's warmth
trickling through fingers, releasing them onto the page;

refresh this parched world with your subtle song.

 


VI.

I wait, wondering when words of wisdom
will wing their way into my heart -
my eyes are empty of elusive embraces;
I find no message here to soothe my soul.

I watch and wait, for I can do no more -
I long for the moments we shall kindle together,
two matches in search of a flame. 

 

 


VII.

His eyes, feral with frivolity’s flames, utter mere brilliance

for all to discern - or none. He shimmers,

spent within these moonlit shadows, aghast

at dawn’s imminent arrival, not yet done with night’s rising song.


Unconscionable is the light that encroaches 
upon this silent, swaying sanctuary.
Undetermined are the depths to which we shall plunge,
ripened plums dangling furtively
from elegant branches bestowed by surrendered soil.

We shall tarry in this luminous darkness
for as long as it takes love to encircle us within her jeweled crown,
for as long as we deem necessary these fruits of our labors,
shivering orbs of delectable design.

His eyes, banked as embers upon a dying hearth,
hold great heat within sultry spheres - he turns to me,

laughing slowly as we push the sun back beneath the hollowed hills.

Night will not be diminished by the casual approach

of incessant demands, for its powers and charms
are far greater than the coming of day.

 

 


VIII.

 

Bitter secrets stand aloft with ancient knowledge, 

gnarling between bark and bite -

lies with black wings flutter. I swing at them 

with wicked, fallen branches, burled with ancient bark.


They fall with deception,
such rancid fruit on fallow ground -

they shall nurture sunken roots inside this sullen soil.


They cannot outwit the forest I am becoming,

no matter how deep or dark 

their clawing of night.

 



IX.

Opalescent prayers of morning moan.
We rise like birds into warm wind, glistening sun.

Our feathers lift in flight.

Your hands, my hands 

pour ink upon delicate parchment, thick with knowing.

Trees are born within wild arches

of delicately-woven moments.

Your lips, my lips
part, come together, fluid motions of rapture.

Autumn sighs;
we fall like leaves into the forest bed, keening.

We are born in songs of lace,
drifting mist through branches, bare with remembrance.

Smooth and ancient stones,
we glide, water glides around us.

Your eyes, my eyes -
dusky rivers are we, seeking ocean’s roar.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Raner Maria Rilke with Baladine Klossowska, 1923 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes


 
 
Photographers unknown
 
 
Prompts:
 
My chosen prompts are Letter 1 and Letter 8, but if I have to choose only one,
let it be the first letter. Must I write? Indeed. I have no other choice.
 
Letter 1 "...ask yourself in the most silent hour of your night: must I write?"
.

Letter 2 "Irony: Don't let yourself be controlled by it, especially during uncreative moments."
.

 

Letter 3 "I learn it every day of my life, learn it with pain I am grateful for: patience is everything!"

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Letter 4 "...try to love the questions themselves... books written in a very foreign language."

.
Letter 5 "...there is much beauty here, because everywhere there is much beauty."

.
Letter 6 "...there is only one solitude, and it is vast, heavy, difficult to bear..."

.
Letter 7 "...that something is difficult must be one more reason for us to do it."

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Letter 8 "...ask yourself whether these large sadnesses haven't rather gone right through you..."

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Letter 9 "...that you may find in yourself enough patience to endure and enough simplicity to have faith..."

.
Letter 10 "Art too is just a way of living..."


 

http://picture-poems.com/rilke/ 

 

http://www.allspirit.co.uk/rilke.html

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

"A poet is an unhappy being whose heart is torn by secret sufferings, but whose lips are so strangely formed that when the sighs and the cries escape them, they sound like beautiful music... and then people crowd about the poet and say to him: 'Sing for us soon again;' that is as much as to say, 'May new sufferings torment your soul.'". - Soren Kierkegaard

 

"Among the Haida Indians of the Pacific Northwest, the verb for "making poetry"

is the same as the verb "to breathe".

~ Tom Robbins, from "Another Roadside Attraction"
 
 
 
  

 
 
 

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 30
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    How do you do it?
    How are your thoughts immeasurable
    and you never cease to ignite
    intellect and sensation?

    Each section of this poem
    unfolds a new story, and
    it is as if they could be
    separate poems entirely.

    These lines really placed a
    weight on my heart, touched me deeply;

    "No more will you hear my voice or read my trembling thoughts -
    they will be whispers tossed within the wind,
    a rustle of leaves to be forgotten beside your sleepy fire."

    The beauty and depth those lines alone,
    among many others, exudes is just
    exceptional. A character that I
    can reckon with is created amid
    those lines... and I found a
    good lump of my past there.

    Thank you for sharing this
    masterpiece with all of us,
    your fans in poetry.

    Luv ya daughta!


  • crivanea silver member
    November 30
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    ....wow.....

    i love the first vignette
    love the fifth vignette

    love the following lines:

    Poetry does not look deeply into my eyes,
    then lie to me.

    Autumn sighs;
    we fall like leaves into the forest bed, keening.


    what a beautiful poem! only a silver?!

    a wonderful piece written in an elegant voice..so beautifully done


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 22
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    a well earned silver

    your writes are always an awakening and a joy.. I have no words, just a whole line of sighs though V. touched something deep inside me.
    Upon an ancient tide,
    poetry drifted into this realm,

    breathing calm light into sullen eyes,

    beyond the edges of the sky, to fall softly like summer rain.

    Cup your hands and feel the wild water's warmth
    trickling through fingers, releasing them onto the page;

    refresh this parched world with your subtle song.

    I am so lucky to call you friend!


  • JinSays gold member
    November 22
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    I agree with Laura. this is by far the most meaningful write I've ever read from you. This will be your opus, the one my kids will be listening to on audiobooks in the future. this poem opens slowly and breathes heavily against the cheek. It doesnt hide it's meaning behind pretty words or attractive position, but jumos in with both feet and submerges. excellent, a definite favorite, by far.
    Rilke looks very very good on you. thank you for sharing your talent, lovely.
    always,
    jin


    • Night Hope gold member
      November 22
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      Thank you for your very lovely comment, Jin.
      I appreciate your thoughtful words on this piece. Ahhh, but
      I hope my opus is yet to be written...many long years from now. Thank you for hosting this great contest and for provoking me so deeply and so well, Sweetie.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 7

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    i agree with the previous comments. i have long admired your scholarly way of approaching your poems, your additions to your author's notes that both educate and inspire.

    good luck in the contest.


  • Lord Gegishov
    November 6

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    I must agree with penman: I feel I have just went on a journey into the snow covered mountains. The things I have seen are indescribable, the things I have felt too remarkable for words to even attempt a description of. I have been aware of Rilke for a long time and have read many of the letters, but I have never read any of his poems. I think that will soon change. I will be adding it to my "check out list" for next week's library trip, although I wonder if I will be disappointed, and think that it was all a hoax, and that Rilke was only a prop and all the words were inspired by your soul alone, for truly they seem far superior than anything I have encountered in his letters, although those are superb, also. Your poetry seems to me decidedly more firm as I read it now. Before, it was as though reading the words of an angel singing exceedingly beautiful songs as she bathed beneath a waterfall. Now your poetry brings to mind that same angel, who, after deciding to explore mankind and the world, has experienced all of their beauty, heartbreak, cruelty, and serene moments, and decided to write of those in the sand and upon the clouds. I wish to be no where else but in the gold and black shadows of these beautiful words.


  • penman gold member
    November 6

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    Excellent

    i feel like I went on a trip, each a glimpse so intent and vivid. They invoke such great thoughts and images. The very best in the contest


  • meic
    November 5

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    This was majestic in its sweeping scope and effortlessly [to the reader!] lyrical. There is nothing I would even think to modify - 'twas enough to marvel at your poetic mastery and be profoundly moved. Wonderful!



    Mike


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    November 4

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    to date, this is the best i've ever read from you - it kept my full attention from start to end. there are places i'd edit the line-breaks to maximize impact, but i think that is merely personal preference. this part, i thought was simply stunning, both in verbiage choice and depth of emotion:

    "It holds my hand when grief grows too thick with thorns,
    brambles around my shuddering bones and brings me nourishment
    when I am pale and worn."

    this piece is exquisite and from what i've read of Rilke this evening, you've certainly done him justice.


    laura.


    • Night Hope gold member
      November 4
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      Thank you, Laura. Actually, I originally had quite a few more line breaks, but I pulled them up a bit, so it wouldn't be so blasted long. I'm trying to preserve Jin's vision a bit by doing so. I'm pleased you enjoyed it. My hands are certainly glad it's finally finished.

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