I thought you loved me
I thought you cared
So why didn't you tell me
That you would always be there
"It just isn't working"
That's what you said instead
If you don't watch it
I will soon be dead
I can't live my life without you
Why even make me try
You just know
That you're going to make me cry
I just miss your warm embrace
The way you looked into my eyes
But now I realized something
Everything you told me were lies
You enjoyed being with the other girl
More than you liked seeing me
I think I deserve to know
Because it would really help me see
You played me like a fool
And I just had to take the bait
But by the time you say your sorry
It will be way too late
Author notes
I felt like being in someone else's shoes....so I decided to write this from my friend, Brittany's perspective. Her boyfriend just broke up with her, and that is basically how she reacted.
"nothing else matters"
Written April 14th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
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What did you think
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excellent write. It's sad but it's something that unfortunately I think most of us go through (and If you're me, you've gone through it SEVERAL times! yikes.) and you put it into the words that so many of us think but few of us say. Great job.
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Thanks for entering my contest... Good luck!!! I'll make meaningful comments when I judge the poems... I'm just thanking everybody for entering...
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I LOVE THIS POEM. it is hanging on my wall....as you know. He he. But really. I used to feel this way and it made me happy to have a poem that realated to me by someone else. But even though i am okay now...i still LOVE this poem. But like i said. I lvoe all of your poems. why? because your really really really good at writing them! HA! love you lots and forever!
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Wow
Wow, guys are such lame jerks! I can't stand them sometimes, cause thats how they can sometimes be. Great Poem here, I'm hurting because of my best guy friend who has turned into a jerk, its amazing how nothing ever seems to be their fault. Great Poem, I hope you're friend will feel better soon.
---Sara
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great poem.... the flow, lines, words, emotions... all perfect. excellent work. i hope things get better for brittany.
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ok this was AWSOME! and my cousin on allpoe (HollowFlame) wrote a poem about me and my bad relationship from my perspective not too long ago, tittles "oh phantom" anyway, this was really neat to read, being in someone esles shoes is allways interesting
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WOW, great write. I totally thought this was your experience. True talent shows you can walk in another shoes, and no one would ever know this wasn't your situation. You clearly demonstraighted painful emotions here. Awesome job.
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great
Great job. If this happened to someone else and you wrote what you saw, this is amazing. I felt the sad emotions and hurt. I thought it was about you. Excellent job on this. Queen
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really good.... keep it up
this was a great write.... you pull the reader in and make them care which is a great talent
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