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Walk in my shoes - Acrostic

Waking alone,
Agony, dispair,
Looking though I don't really care,
Keeping myself to myself.

Alone.

Much to easy to you,
Idiotic views of ease and simplicity, my
Life is great, no pain or hurt,
Easy.

I don't agree, but
Never do you see me true,

Money buys everything,
You think so anyway, why dont you try walking in my

Shoes before saying that you know me,
Home is hell, Mum is stressed, Dad is gone,
Omens rain thick, walk, walk,
Empty streets, now you'll see,
See the real me.

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D o n t O b j e c t i f y M e

Ooohh god! I officially hate acrostic, sorry for the really shabby work!

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  • MassMan
    November 17
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    Not Shabby

    You have no cause to apologize for this offering. Acrostics may not be the meduium of your choice, but you have very expressively got your message across in a way that is personal, and can be identified with by many. You have shown in your words why there is such a great need for others, to put themselves in your situation, before assuming they have a clue as to what the personal truth & circumstances really are.
    Mission accomplished! Thank you for adding your voice, in your style to our contest.


  • Babies Blues
    November 14
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    I thought it was pretty good for an Acrostic... to tell the truth,
    not shabby at all
    An acrostic limits you and you must come up with creativity to make one seem like a poem at all. you had me..


  • TormentedPhantom gold member
    November 6

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    You did it! They aren't easy to do, but you succeeded! I think you could look at this process as a kind of life lesson, we have to learn and try to accomplish anything. Giving up is easy, but to have tried, and given our best is success. Well done!


  • BlackRimmedEyes
    November 5

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    i think what really says the most is reading the letters of the acrostic part-walk a mile in my shoes. dont stop writing, and member-i love you!!!


  • barelyXbreathing
    November 4

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    the poem is created, but it makes me sad about what could have created it... i hope u feel better. <3

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