Heated lips touch
with fusing embrace.
Passion mixes with lust
and as they spark this fire erupts.
Spreads through the body
and set the soul ablaze.
Gasping breaths and raging moans
pulsate through the blistering room.
It turns from red to the purest white,
as two melt into a single mass.
Til finally the supernova explodes and
the fire is staled only to build again.
Author notes
this was inspired by a friend of mine (sensualbutterfly, look her up) a poem she post got my fire going and i wrote this trying to work up my Mojo, i know i can do better but this is me getting back on the horse tell me what you think, keep it flowing
if you think of a title share please
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
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I think you should call this supernova. I love the flow and the passion in this. I know that poetess and she can get you going with her work. This is hot sorry it took me so long to get this back to you enjoyed the heat SH
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A very passionate piece! You've expressed emotions well here. As for titles, not something I am good with but how about 'beyond the flames'? Or 'igniting sparks' told you I wasn't much good but thought I would suggest them
Well penned hun, 
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lol thanks for trying i will roll those names around and see which one moves me, thanks for the comment
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Love this because I've been there many times. It's turw, the passion of love is like fire. I also love how you write this with so much class.
Love,
Amera♥
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thanks for the comment and i am hapy you enjoyed it, funny i never reall saw myself with class
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It is a class poem. I can vividly see the erotic parts yet you let my mind do it; you didn't tell me graphically. This is class erotic poetry.
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hmmmmm, interesting
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I wish I could help you come up with a tittle for this. It is really good, short but hot. I have been by that poets page before and I know the work well lol. SH
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so you know what i mean, lol, thanks for the comment
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i like it
Its very passionate, and has awesome imagery, there was just one thing I noticed that didn't sound quite right in my head, though that might just be my head. "Gasping breathes and raging moan" maybe breathes was supposed to be breaths? Dunno I could be wrong but just thought I'd throw it out there, cuz I did like it!
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thank you for the comment and the heads up i honestly didn't catch that.
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I love it Aaron!!!! It was so hot! Jump back on that damn horse and ride sweetheart ride! This was GREAT!!!
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lol, i am glad the muse for it liked it, thanks for the comment and i think i will ride this for a while
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