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My eyes are frozen embers,
soaked in gas to be re-lit...
It seems the wind,'
from a snake-quick tongue,
has crystallized your spit.

(I know the tongue was on your face,
so well aware of it,

the tongue that wagged from perfect lips,
so well aware of it!)

How many licks
does it take for a clit
to arrive at the heart
through her slit?

And how many kicks
does it take for a dog
just to stoop,
and refuse doing tricks?

Less time than it takes
for a Judas soft kiss...
In a fraction of a flick
from an adder's black hiss...

half a number on the plunger

full of opioid bliss...

 

(so well aware of it!)



Author notes

Strangely, this all came from not being able to sleep. My eyes were red in the mirror and I thought of the first 2 lines. It struck me as Poeesque, so ran with it. I kind of tried to capture the sense of mad urgency Poe conveyed in his poem"the Bells". Just consider it a belated Halloween write.

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  • Candyknife gold member
    November 16
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    hmm

    definitely eery feel to it
    i got a subtle sense of cynicism that gently wallowed throughout the piece hard to explain exactly the picture in my mind but it was a good one to have while reading this thanks for sharing


  • Max Alexandersson
    November 15
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    "It seems the wind,'
    from a snake-quick tongue,
    has crystallized your spit."

    That part is so fucking good.


  • Cannonsfire
    November 4

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    I think Poe may have difficulty dealing with the um 'clit' bit but then again lol society dictated back then, whereas here it don't, me likes it C


  • bloodlust83
    November 4

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    WOW...
    I have chills, opioid bliss indeed!

    "Less time than it takes
    for a Judas soft kiss...
    In a fraction of a flick
    from an adder's black hiss...

    half a number on the plunger

    full of opioid bliss..."

    Awesome, thanks for sharing~
    Linz


  • completely mad
    November 4

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    ...this was great...loved it...the first 2 lines are awesome
    just out of curiosity
    how many licks does it take??


  • Daizee silver member
    November 4

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    Just as some poems make me sigh, some almost make me shudder. I read this aloud a few times and loved the dramatic darkness.


  • jessica rabbit.
    November 4

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    Happy Halloween, indeed.

    ... I wonder if the owl from the tootsie-pop commercials knows the answer.

  • Rowan gold member
    November 4

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    I like the stream of consciousness you tapped into... always go with it, it works. Great alliteration too. Now, off to bed...

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