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silver linings





in the young morning
i woke with sharp eyes
like a magpie’s

saw the diamond
inside you
beyond dirt layers

and i know i’ve
scratched more skin
left more bruises
than we could count
or make right again

but from my digging
third world children
had hope soup for dinner
to last them
till rescue arrived

from my claws
thrust inside you
like shameless thieves
i’ve planted strength seeds
in the solid earth
of my fingers

and i can only wish
on the milky way
that you, too, have learned
nothing can bring you down
the moss ladder.





Author notes

Nov. 4, 2009

Sometimes I write poetry because I have no real words.
Sometimes I play this words-you-won't-read game 'cause there's nothing real I can do.
i can only wish... and I do.

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Comments


  • Age of Rain
    November 17

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    the whole 'diamond in the rough' things is very cliche, but you worked it in nicely I thought. Very layered self reflection in this piece. Well done.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    November 5

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    I found this both perplexing and fascinating! Your word selections seem very careful, as do your line breaks and the total flow, leaving beautiful images on the mind's eye. But of course, I am not at all sure what you intended, so I am left with my imagination. Perhaps that is the point... a great read! Lita


  • jessica rabbit.
    November 4

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    I know that feeling, all too well.

    I like the fact that this is a complete sentence, and never once is there a grammar mistake. many, many kudos.