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the fear i feal

the fear i feal
it is so real
the roof is crashing
down to close
twobit say
hurry up ponyboy
but i contiue
helping the kids
as soon as they
are all out
we run to the exit
but there is no way
to feel safe
not when
the door is blocked
the window we run to
the window i excape
but for johnny it's to late
so the fear consumes me

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  • monkey3243
    November 4
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    i likke it like no offense but i dont rlly get it but still rlly good!!


    • tashgirl
      November 6
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      it is about a book i am reading for school and i hade to make a poem about one of the people


  • evershine-90
    November 4

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    A dark piece, it speaks of hopelessness and a feeling of being trapped in the form of a story. There are quiet a few spelling errors
    feal - feel, twobit? continue, escape
    Otherwise its a great piece, almost has an haunting feel. good job and keep it up!