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Touch me

Touch me,
Let your hands wander the
                          hills
              and valleys
The contours
          of my desire
                    for you

Bury yourself deep
            in my need
                      this aching yearning
Fanned to roaring life
                          by your wicked tongue
              and sensuous words

Fill me with your
            Fingers and tongue
your pounding release

Take this gift from me
        and mould it
                    like molten glass
                                into a thing of beauty
With the strength
of your hand
              transform me
Into a glowing effigy

Let me bath you
                  in the hot
            wet
benediction

Of my love

Author notes

Okay fallendust I've tried my best... Hope you like it.

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  • zee91190
    November 11
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    Amazing imagery. It is a well written poem and shows the effort you have put into it.
    "With the strength
    of your hand
    transform me
    Into a glowing effigy " I love those lines! Thank you for your entry.

    All the best


  • LesbianOfLove
    November 11

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    Mmm, Bravo! Amazing flow and sweet description. This really took me along on a journey. Keep writing! Good luck in your contests!


  • xxBlack Dawnxx
    November 4

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    very sweet and sassy, paints an amaising picture for the mind very smoothly wrote

  • CalistaMoon
    November 4

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    Wow. This was amazing. You have such a fantastic vocabulary and know just how to use it. It hooked me in from the first stanza. And the pattern in which you write this poem is also enticing. Again, simply fantastic. Needless to say I'll be looking through the rest of your work.


    • Phed
      November 4
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      This was quite a surprise as I've really been struggling to write anything for a while. I must admit... I am a linguaphile. I love words, long words, new words, sexy words or obscure words. I love them all.

      Thanks for the comment!


  • fallendust
    November 4

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    Very very enjoyable indeed! This poem was well written and the flow was really good. The wavy lines gave a nice touch to the poem as the reader reads. It was definitely erotic, and intimate but also very sensual and I love how you captured that as well. Hot and beautiful all wrapped up into one poem and that makes for a fabuluos write indeed! THank you so much for entering my contest. Your entry is most appreciated!
    Have a wonderful day!
    SIncerely,
    Sarah

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