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I Burn

1.

 

Lover's domino-tumble-heart
serenades disaster with eloquent cacophany;
powerlines hum
above groaning cornfields,

deja' vu mimes grace before wrath

(like the curl of your lips in pleasure)...

but where,

my love,

do you lie?...

 

 

2.

 

 

I remember being there with her,

beyond the noise of constant cars

where space steals night from city lights,

while locals who howl in moonlight

sleep.

(or turn ever more frigid in a bar ditch,

dead,

after too many cheap light beers.)

 

 

3.

 

 

I can feel the blacktop warm my legs

as dark calls out for you. 

 

 

4.

 

 

She...

(the memory)

was dark of skin,

with sad sad eyes that had seen too much

(played close to the vest, like cards...),

a stripper in a valley of milky way brilliance,

fully clothed,

yet lithe.

 

She stared down sky for winks of fire
flung quick into morning light's kiss

at the edge of a spraying horizon's first breath,

where sunrays break magic with vision.

We laughed at the tragic and perfect new day

that would soon leave us nude in it's wake.

 

 

5.

 

 

With nefarious lips dripping honey and wine,

with a smirk and a drag,

She spoke:

 

"I am much like these wires that hang overhead.

I travel.

I churn.

I am danger.

I clip over wasteland-towns,

rye-blind,

and am bound among rows of erections wired high...

every one of which towers the same.

Trapped in the black of a visible shell,
hot light as it wishes for ground....
where stars skim spheres

and are skipped like stones

from the grasp of an unseen throw."

 

 

6.

 

 

A thousand hands had touched her breasts,

her slender thighs,

her lips...

Those lips that

held pout in  sensual grins

and played out sirens,

loud for fear of...

sirens loud for haunting want of...

that thief of light

(called love)

that sparks between souls collide,

that threatened to grow in our

shutter wide eyes....

 

 


so I touched her hand instead...

a refusal to use and be used.

 

 

7.

 

 

Stalks that swayed raised up toward clouds,

yellow and drowned in electric screams.

The Johns that craved her moans were fools:

her worth was silent with awe.

Her treasures scrolled wise from her wound scarred heart.

 

8.

 

So I wait for your power to lash like light

in the fog of memory's fade....

for you,

(not her),

are wires,

my love...

grown mad to their follicles edge,

with a beauty so fierce to rend heavens to hell

as I burn in the bends of your hand.

 

Consumed...

 

just a husk in your hand.

 

 


 

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  • syd is chill
    November 23
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    WOW. this was an amazing read.
    "so i touched her hand instead...a refusal to use and be used"
    what a gentleman you are


  • mgmc gold member
    November 5

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    This is eloquent and full of feeling! Tremendous use of imagery and great structure. Highly skilled! But what really grabs and makes one want to re-read multiple times is the depth of expression. The phrase "so I touched her hand instead.......a refusal to use and be used" touched in particular.........though the whole was wonderful to read. A gift for the reader--thanks!


  • Cannonsfire
    November 4

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    I wonder sometimes if heaven and hell will ever be satisfied with what we go through in life and love and the sway of the electrodes that give us just enough to shock us...the pins and needle effect of some people in our lives, but we would just say that for a moment it was always worth it C


  • Lowell Poe
    November 4

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    Are you kidding......
    your wondering if this is good...
    well its not good...
    it is outrageous!
    where the....where did this come from!...?
    this is the very depths of a true poets soul.
    My God.....
    there was one..wait ...oh here....

    She stared down sky for winks of fire
    flung quick into morning light's kiss
    at the edge of a spraying horizon's first breath,
    where sunrays break magic with vision.
    We laughed at the tragic and perfect new day
    that would soon leave us nude in it's wake.

    this is so freakin wild....
    im spotlighting this...!

    A thousand hands had touched her breasts,
    her slender thighs,
    her lips...
    Those lips that
    held pout in sensual grins
    and played out sirens,
    loud for fear of...
    sirens loud for haunting want of...
    that thief of light
    [called love)
    that sparks between souls collide,
    that threatened to grow in our
    shutter wide eyes....

    Damn...dont ya love her as shes walking out the door.....
    Your a natural brother...
    this is not some...poem on some site...this is epic...
    it's like a good joint..
    i just want to share it....
    and i am promoting it right now!

    you are a frighteningly great talent..
    a force to reckoned with...
    there are few here i would be wary about going against in a contest....
    but i'll tell you this..
    if i enter a contest and see your name.....
    i best take out the old big guns...
    cause im gonna need them to go against such obvious talent...
    My call.....an out of body experince......
    This stands alone my friend...
    what ever ya did last nite...
    share with me...
    i want to get to this place.

    Liam












  • Rowan gold member
    November 4

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    I had to smile at Etaina's honesty. lol.
    Beautiful work James, unfortunately, fortunately? I can relate to it. winks.


  • jessica rabbit.
    November 4

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    you know, there are times I read pieces like yours and wish I was old enough to do so -- though I understand it, I can't relate. eh. I think this is a type of writing only experience can create, and thus I can't say anything more than: this is fantastic. usually long poems turn me off, but this works wonderfully.

    thanks for sharing.


    • white stone
      November 4
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      lol... too funny. I've been revising this poem for over an hour and a half, and I kid you not, I kept thinking "I want Etaina to read this... if anyone will dig this, it'll be her." And there you are, so cool. I wouldn't be too much in a hurry to relate to this one personally though, lol. Thanks for reading.

      • jessica rabbit.
        November 4
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        haha. I'm psychic, didn't you know? thanks for the thought.

        yeah, I think there were certain aspects that stood out more than others.. like the inherent eroticism you describe seeing in her, and the description with space and city lights.. and the word usage blows me away. anyway.

        I dig most of your work, so there's no surprise there. And lately my favorites list has been cluttered with poets who are backtracking to celestial prose and poems that extend infinitely, when they should have ended 30 lines ago. It's refreshing to see something new -- even in your own voice, which is cool because it changes from piece to piece.

        I'll stop rambling and get out of your hair now.

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