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Dependable Wolf

look into my eyes
be one within me
don't be afraid
don't believe
the things they say
I would never harm you
I'm here to protect you
forget about knights
in shining armor
wolves are more dependable

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  • SilverWolf
    December 2
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    i liked it! its true, wolfs are way more awesome and dependable! well, then again thats just my wolf view point
    for being very short it was very good. the lines flowed together well and you had a nice pot of a beginning and a middle and a end which can be hard to do with shorter poems. you drove your point home. you didnt bore the reader (which is a good thing!) and kept it interesting. good luck in all your contests!!

    silverwolf


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    November 30
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    hehehehe wolves probably are more dependable hehe loving you're take on this prompt btw xx DD


  • Antebellum
    November 13

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    I'm here to protect you
    forget about knights
    in shining armor
    wolves are more dependable
    ..............
    This is wonderful. amazing ending.
    I really dont know what else to say...I just really enjoyeed the wording here.
    thanks for entering.


  • wander of the sky
    November 7
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    this is so beautiful and spiritual i love this one


  • SamanthaSam gold member
    November 5

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    I really enjoyed this part the best:

    I'm here to protect you
    forget about knights
    in shining armor
    wolves are more dependable

    Very nice imagery and use of language here. Thinking of one sitting beside you and not harming us but actually protecting us is a lovely thought and you portrayed it very well. Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering this nice poem. Have a nice night.
    Sam I Am


  • BarbedWireButterfly
    November 4

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    Awesome. This one flowed so well. The content you've used is an interesting take on the prompt. The point of view is really quiet interesting and is quiet original. The poem really drew the reader in. At first I thought the last line didn't fit but after reading over it again I realised that it did give this closure for the poem and was quiet a useful way to do it. A very enjoyable read


  • Night FireWolf
    November 4

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    If no other poem has ever touched my heart, then this one has....I love this....Really, really love it. As in I wish I could frame it, and hang it in my room. Beautiful....Well, being a wolf, I can relate all too well...Just..Wow...I look up to you for this...Amazing...


  • spiritual wolf
    November 4

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    that is completly true and your right i absolutely loved it. you did beautifully.. wolves are magnificent creatures


  • Ruby Demona
    November 4

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    I love your take on the prompt. Beautifully done! What a wonderful point of view from the wolf, telling you to forget about the 3 little pigs and Little Red Riding Hood, and to save him as well. All creatures deserve to be saved. It's kinda like an animal rights poem if you think about it. At least that's the way I took it. My two favorite parts are: 1. "don't be afraid", with the wolf telling the reader to not be scared and things are okay and 2. the ending is so very wonderful
    "forget about knights
    in shining armor
    wolves are more dependable".

    Good luck in the contest! I hope you do well!


    RUBY@@@


  • NyteShade
    November 4

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    I love wolves such majestic creatures with a hint of mystery surrounding them.
    Nice write

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