wish on the red leaf star
the wish will definately come true
it's pure
it's real
don't wish on the wrong one
remember
the wishing red leaf
shines brightly
just like a star in the sky
so be careful
don't step on it
don't crush it
or you may just lose your dreams
and your heart's deepest desire
Author notes
A Falling Star and the picture is the prompt:
http://gilad.deviantart.com/art/Falling-Star-42860163
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Comments
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This part just might be true:
the wishing red leaf
shines brightly
just like a star in the sky
so be careful
don't step on it
don't crush it
or you may just lose your dreams
and your heart's deepest desire
I really enjoyed your poem and the way you wrote it, with hope. Good flow and metaphors. You did very nicely on this and I want to thank you for writing in my contest and good luck in it.
Have a good night.
Hugs, Sam I Am
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Lovely enchanting write
Nice metaphoricalreferences between a leaf
and /or leaves [Mother Nature] and life
"so be careful
don't step on it
don't crush it
or you may just lose your dreams
and your heart's deepest desire"
Excellent penning..Write on!..wish you the vert best..David
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THIS IS SO LOVELY!!!
Why just the other day while I was out walking in the warmth of a bright fall day I saw many such leaves on the ground. I just had to capture a few in some pictures!
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