"She was a goddess once,"
you tell me in the middle of the night,
looking into your eyes,
I know that it is true,
at least in your mind.
You rave of her beauty,
perfection,
her intellect,
unmatched.
So there's no explanation,
no way for me to get around this,
your love, your perfect, pretty love,
was a goddess once
and I'm just me,
mortal and bland, just as I've always been.
If she was a goddes once,
I want to ask you,
why is she no longer?
But I am afraid of the answer
for you and for me.
Author notes
As soon as I read the title of this contest I was inspired. Thank you for this contest! My inspiration was not drawn from the picture so much as from the title.
A contest entry
- she was a goddess once.. by JinSays.
1103 points, ended November 11, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I really liked where you were going with, in this-but then things sort of shifted abruptly, wish there were a little more here to make me understand the end.
anyway,
thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, and I wish you all the best.
love,
jin -
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Thank you. I do agree, this could be improved. Thank you for your comment.
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Wow. So raw and powerful. Very strong message. I love the last stanza, especially.
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Thanks, babe.
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