Take me by the hand.
Teach me how to see.
Remove for me these glasses
Put on by society.
Take me by the heart.
Remember unto me
How it was in childhood;
Sweet simplicity.
I seem to have forgotten
How to walk or breathe
Without these chains of hatred
That pull me to the sea.
I cannot tread this water
Without the aid of mind,
And mine is worn and tattered
It has been for all time.
Take me by the hand.
Teach me to be free
Of this deathly, chilling tide,
So it will let me be.
Author notes
I'm so terrible.
I am lost.
I can't remember how to simply -be- without all of this.
Can someone teach me?
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Aimee I feel so sad when reading this along with your authors notes. All I can say is we all develop baggage in our lives, we cant help it. I'm sure there's a lovely woman in here striving to get out and be the person she wants to be. Just open yourself up and look at who you are, you'll probably see a lovely person staring back at you..."Big hugs Aimee"....Dan
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This is so incredibly sad. I think we all feel that way, miss the simplicity, taking things on face value and just being ourselves. I too have reached a time in my life when I wonder 'who am I'. So sorry you are feeling lost and I truly hope that feeling passes soon.
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the sincere emotion and questions underlying this pen more than make up for the slight rhyme awkward. This is an enchanting poem. =)
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Sometimes we are shackled by childhood events that mold us ... it is difficult to shed those things that hold us back from just "being" ... this write is filled with angst and sadness. Great job showing your feelings
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Yout rhyming is a bit awkward at places but hardly matters for such a well composed poem. The lines are captivating with their lost innocence and sad undertones. My favourite part is the last two lines of the 3rd verse
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Good write...
..... dark, you seem to be at a point where you feel helpless, but I am here to say that you can achieve any thing you mind can concieve and make your heart believe. You have some realy talent you can accomplish alot!
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This is such a very sad poem Aimee but quite beautiful.
Your rhyme is excellent and a poem that I can easily read over and over again and will.
Lulu
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Just beautiful Aimee
Your imagery makes for a wonderful read and the rhyme is certainly very well done
Gaylene
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Lovely words ans beautifully written Aimee. What I love here is you could have called it anything as there are so many powerful lines here but you chose "blinded by sight"...Aren't we all...Dan
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