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Give Me an Amen

Give me an Amen, I am begging please,

handle me quickly Lord, with gentle ease

I am losing it, I can't take much more

heart and souls splitting, to the very core

Tears are flowing, can you not hear my pleas?

~j~~j~~j~ 

Words I often whispered, down on my knees,

hands raised to Heaven and the Devil flees

Is there another miracle in store?

Give me an Amen!

 

~j~~j~~j~

Angels have arrived, I feel Your hands breeze

time is of essence, fates eternal squeeze

Lying to myself, I took a detour,

searching for answers, You opened the door

The battle is won and ol' Satan leaves...

Give me an Amen!

 

Author notes

This was in response to Griswolds Poem: and I say Amen
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5851659

I penned it in response, and in the same form. I do not care to fight with him for Gold, cause i would win lol..so I didnt enter the contest nah, not really, no i mean what i said but im not
Thanks Scott for the inspiration for this poem, so this one is for you,

Love ya,
Tory

Rondeau

A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a
sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a
refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the
same metrical length).

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  • Peripatetic gold member
    November 23
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    Amen!

    Whatever similarity of experience I might have with anyone, I know that I can never say I know how you feel. So let me say how this makes me feel.

    Should I face a time when there is nothing I can do but pray, I pray I may as you have here. God knows my vanity and absent heart when things are fine, but I hope that in the trying times I'll trust his love and grace with a contrite heart and true humility. I would never ask for troubles to renew my faith, but bless you, Darlin', if through yours I and others seek his grace on your behalf and find a portion spared for those who pray for you.

    The compelling nature of the poem is not dependent on its form which is used to fine effect. Rather, it is the heartfelt content of faith, not blind, but with eyes wide open.

    (I have visited your page, your poems and your contests from time to time, but I can't recall if I have ever stopped to comment. Just let me say you've given me smiles and thrills and the occasional blush, but most of all I have been touched with all the great things others on the site have said to and about you. You are some kind of special, but you knew that!)


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      November 23
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      Thank you so much for your comment I am actually like
      I really do not think i am any special but appreciate you thinking so
      I am just me, Passionspromise,
      Your words have brought a smile to my face and some tears
      for I came back and read and realized
      where i had been to where i am today, and
      indeed, life is good
      Thank you for the reminder I so desperately needed.

      <3 Passionspromise


  • jackreed3 gold member
    November 8
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    Aman.... jesus saves...


  • JohnnyD gold member
    November 4

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    God will save, you only have to believe and trust in him

    which you already well know

    love ya,

    Len


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 4
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    Amen, keep it flowing


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    November 4

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    love the way you have the little heart rate thingy going on,
    it makes the poem seem even more real. your title is great,
    this is an very enjoyable piece of poetry.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    joyce


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 4

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    A most awesome powerful spiritual piece!
    Rock on!
    I love the strength in this; the sheer power of "Amen" as in, "LET IT BE, LORD!"
    Excellent pen!
    Rock on!


  • poorme
    November 4

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    perfection yet again! yours does compliment scott's wonderful.

    love this hon!

  • atomic-angel
    November 4

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    amen

    I am losing it, i can't take much more, hearts and souls splitting, to the very core.....wow that line in itself, wuz and is, such a reality in my life rt now. Great pennin of emotions, down on my knees is where I need 2b, bcuz I kno thas how we attack da enemy and mk him flee. Ahhh..... knowing and doing are two different things, can I get an Amen???? Love da write!!! Love da title!!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    November 4

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    Perfect...you are always GOLD to me. Not because I love you though...simply because you write from the heart and soul and I feel every word...I am jealous because I have never written any of these wonderful forms ! I too afraid to try! This is wonderful.

    Love the BG...LOVE YOU~~~



    Azzie


  • princedammy
    November 4
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    A M E N (Caps intended)

    I love the way you have worded this beautiful piece. It's such that almost everyone can relate with.

    Imagine a world where all we ask for is granted instantly! One can only imagine the chaos that would cause. However, God knows our heart desires and he will grant our pressing needs.

    Thanks for sharing.

  • Michaelzaza
    November 4
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    nice.


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    November 4

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    Wetend to turn to the Lord in dark times. This made me smile with how strong this was. When you give God glory the devil will try to turn you at first then run if you stay strong. Wonderful work as always SH


  • Denerica silver member
    November 3

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    Amen! You did Griswald's poem a justice, it is wonderful, powerful cry out to God, I wanted to stand up and shout with this write. Excellent. Blessings.


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      November 4
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      Thank you so much for your comment and I am honored to hear that it touched you that way!! NOW, CAN I GET AN AMEN!!! AMEN!!!

      <3 Passionspromise


  • Griswold silver member
    November 3

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    Crap honey, mine's better anyways, you just know when you're whipped!!! Very well done sweetheart, re-post it in the contest baby, I don't mind losing to you my love. Love you too honey... Scott

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