by firelight the fissures burn,
crackled; embers rearrange
we watched dawn this way
dangling promises with feet
into oceans of observations
wind whet appetites
until we became sand
tiny grains
running nowhere at all
Author notes
Prompt: You say you'll give me eyes in a world of blindness
A river in a time of dryness
A harbour in the tempest
But all the promises we made
From the cradle to the grave
When all I want is you
- All I Want Is You, U2
A contest entry
- All I Want Is You ... by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended November 15, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Just stunning! Imagery and metaphor burns the page here... I love it.
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Thanks so much for the shiny 
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A superb write with brilliant take on the prompt.
All the best in the contest.
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wow - wonderful imagery combined with metaphor, makes me think that sand is at home where ever it goes, like the people in this poem.
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