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Winter Chill

Missing image

Nights slaughter hope as

pain paints a dreadful portrait

of a love long lost

 

Sanguine tears scald

 a broken heart

Nightmares vibrate

 empty memories as

 

promises once made

now sparkle

above a watery grave

 

Suffocation began years ago

the day you walked out

or perhaps it was

the day you said

 

Hello

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

http://pygar.deviantart.com/art/Winter-Crows-105222023

I have the artist's permission to use his artwork.

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  • AngelBellerose gold member
    November 10

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    I know what you say dear one for the words lay like morat on the lin of my grave.. well said love it always hugs love♥♥

  • Brook-1 gold member
    November 10

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    I love this poem and the twist in the end. Makes one ponder. Very nice with imagery and metaphor. Keep on penning. You do a great job at writing. Have a lovely evening and thank you for letting me read.
    Brook


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    November 6

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    Awh, this was so very pretty. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Great job on this and I wish you the best of luck in the contest


    -Steve-


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 5

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    Dark lonely thoughts
    Waiting for the voice to say hello
    as you walk on by..
    Such a wonderful image to be inspired by
    love ya

    Mum xx


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 4

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    Oh my....The stark ominous picture grabs my attention, but as I read your imagery only emphasizes a morbid gruesome relationship complemented by the prompt, ending with the powerful penning..
    "Suffocation began years ago
    the day you walked out
    or perhaps it was the day
    you said

    Hello.
    It grabs one with eerie thoughts.....I wish you well in the contest...I think you have achieved your objective, niece...quite creepy!

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