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on proximity

breathe under me then,
girl
and as your voice
rises writhing I
will take the deepest
breath

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  • gislanni
    November 26
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    Hm, the intimacy of this is absolutely startling. It has been a while since I have been able to sit down and enjoy a poem purely in the silence where it can sit with me and stay until I can comment about it...Change nothing, what would there be to change? It is simple, erotic. It is surreal.

    *sigh* You are amazing. Where you the world be without your voice?


  • divebar
    November 15
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    excellent


  • decode
    November 3
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    I love this.