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Dark Room Blues

I'm down on my luck,
I'm up on my sorrow,
I'm looking towards the future,
I'm looking towards tomorrow,
what will it hold,
ill never know,
guess ill just have to go.

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  • WideEyedSuicide
    November 3

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    Short, sweet, and to the point I assume. I loved the first two lines the most, "I'm down on my luck, I'm up on my sorrow," I don't know why it just really speaks to me. It's strange, but anyway this is a very great poem, it may be short but gets enough detail. I like that.


  • tidoubleguher
    November 3

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    I'm glad the ending has some perservernce in it (idk if i even spelled that right) but the ending was my favorite part. Nicely set up