One forgets that we are
One.
And when Autumn's dyes are
Trampled under magnolia's
Icy blooming plumes.
We forget that we are
Allone.
I must remember this;
When forests, with scarlets,
Siennas and ambers are aflame,
That the branches will be stripped bare,
Riddled with frost's clutching vines,
Are all allone when winter comes.
This sorrow it begins to elude me.
No longer concerned that the
Plaid blanket nestled over sloping snow
Does not contain a toboggan shaped lover.
To see the scene of gilded rooftops,
Brazen stars pretending that facets of cold
Are its reflection in a mirrors face,
And encumbered boughs of pine trees.
Author notes
Taken in a very strange place with this prompt, never used a poem prompt before. Read a poem by g e m m a that had a line about a toboggan in it, definitely influenced me here. Also influenced by Mark Z. Danielewski's "Only Revolutions" and his "Pelican Poems." But definitely taken in the direction of the wonderful words of Ted Hughes "Seven Sorrows". Never knew he was such a good writer 'til I read that poem.
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A contest entry
- Contest: Poem Prompt - "The Seven Sorrows" by Ted Hughes, Part II (By Invitation Only, Please) by Night Hope.
1200 points, ended November 22, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for coming back with this wonderful poem, Virulent Malice. 
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This is a beautiful poem that reveals the mystery of becoming Allone in Nature so beautifully!
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I'm glad this contest has exposed you to Ted Hughes' writings, as he was a masterful creator in his own right. I've often thought his art was overshadowed by his wife's fame. Initially, I'd thought perhaps "Allone" was a typo, then realized it was actually "All - One" in a mild disguise. Intriguing way of making a point to your readers, Poet. This is a worthy piece and I appreciate your efforts. Thank you for entering my contest, Sweetie. Good luck. 
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"No longer concerned that the
Plaid blanket nestled over sloping snow
Does not contain a toboggan shaped lover."
This is wonderful imagery...has a desolate feel to it that
connects the "allone" theme.
excellent!
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I love this. I really, really do like this. The imagary you've used is just delectable... I especially like "Riddled with frost's clutching vines". In terms of criticism, there is nothing I would change about this. Nothing at all. I like it just the way it is - mysterious, elegant and beautiful.
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