Thoughts rushing through her mind.
Memories, dreams, her whole life flashes within her mind.
The decent memories all seem so forign, so long ago, a speck of sand on the mountain of life.
Oh the pain. The good memories soon vanish.
Once again, the horrible life long memories take over.
Adrenaline rushes through her veins.
Flash after flash, like a horror movie in fast forward, bursts of those devestating, horrible memories fly through her head.
All the commotion drives her mind into an infinate downward spiral.
It's all faling apart.
Then,
Silence...
It's all over.
All the commotion, the bad memories, everything, over.
Now there's only one memory.
The memory of a lonley lost girl,
terrified of the world,of life.
Only the memory.
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i wrote this a while ago.... i didn't thnk ppl. would like it... but I decided to post it anways... i was going through a really rough time...
Comments
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I liked the way you alternate sets of longer lines with shorter ones. It really makes those shorter lines snap. I might add an empty line between "Then," and "Silence..." just because it would further emanate your point.
Nice write, I like the way you approached this subject, it was a little different angle than most people.
Take care,
K-J -
this is so good i love it
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this is so sad, really well done, I can relate to this soo much! you are very talented
thank you so much for entering this contest and best of luck
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this is a great poem not that story behind it is great but the writing of it and the fact you put it up for people to see .
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