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The pain...My pain...

I was hurt
By the ones I love most,
I trusted them with my life,
But they almost took away my life.

They took away my childhood,
I have very few good memories,
'Cause the rest is too horrid,
Or the nightmares will start.

I thought that was the end when I left,
But once more I was wrong.
I still saw them, I still love them,
Although They love me to death,
Sometimes I think they want my death.

Although they've changed,
They still kill me inside,
By telling me I'm not good enough,
Or I'm too dumb to achieve anything.
I love them, from a distance now,
I love them, but they still made that scar
That is forever embedded in my memory and heart.

Author notes

By they, I mean My mother and grandfather. Sometimes other people like their friends. All they did was hurt me. Sometimes they still do.

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  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    November 6

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    It's sad to have someone you love so much not give you the same love in return. That definitely leaves a painful scar that will not go away. You are a very strong person for being able to write about it and for sharing your pain with the rest of us. Wonderful job with this piece, and by the way, I think you are more than good enough, just have to believe in yourself like I do and you will do wonderful in this life

  • MiSsY WiCkEd
    November 5

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    I can feel the pain. I wish you had added the authors notes to the poem. It is quite confronting, and I hope you find strength and confidence and hope. Be strong, because pain only wins when the wounds still hurt and it leaves bruises. I hope you have lots of love, and if not, i hope you find it. It's a very good poem.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 3

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    Great emotional out pouring. I think that so many of us have a similar story to tell. Somebody that they love hurts them/us and we just push it down deep to keep away the hurt, god knows we don't want to tear open the scars. Stopping the hurt once is hard enough, but when a wound is reopened...it aches that much more. Good write. I think in the last line you meant that instead of they. yours, ~gypsy~


  • Be Cold
    November 3

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    I completely understand. My mother can be very cold as well towards me... but just remember that someday you will be free from that household! Be strong and work hard.


  • Kunoichi
    November 3
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    I feel almost exactly the same, Sarah.

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