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[ HE was never ]

HE was never
                      HOME
Always with his friend                               ALCHOLE

                                     mama left at night

                                     loo

                                         king

                                               for

              HE was gone for dAys

                                                 felt like YEARS 

  someone told her

                                             not the family

HE was there

                      on a hospital bed

                                                 not             cause of                   his

                                                                     friend

                                     a TUMOR got his

                                                                  BACK

on tears came

                      is that bad    for

                                               me

                                                  not to

                                              have

                                cryed

they came TOGETHER

          and

fe

   el      a

             part

he's       all  better

 with nomo  of that friend

                        they             fell

        a part

when      her

SON

                       had  a

                    GUN

                               AND.... 

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  • Luly
    November 3
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    THE LAST PART OF THE POEM WAS SOMEONES SON