so the daughter went out my front door;
her stillettos were screaming out "WHORE".
She was told to retry
but that made her cry,
so some prick at her school will now score.
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- Oh, For the Love of Limericks! by MysticGreen.
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Very interesting. Short and very very clear.
very nicely done.
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Funny!
This limerick made me chuckle. Reminds me of my dad when I went to the school leaving party! No boy scored though
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You have painted a vivid word picture in this Limerick. Easy to picture and understand the deteriorating relationship of parent/child. Write on!
Dennis
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Easy to read and understand what's happening in these lines - parent's actions can make children do very stupid things as they try to pay their parents back for their actions. Trouble is, the children most often hurt themselves just as much, if not more, than their parents. Liked rthe flow, rhythm, rhyme and story you tell in these ive lines.
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I love it when poets are able to utilize short forms to their fullest as you have with this one. Without wasting words, you've powerfully communicated the relationship between father and daughter, and tragic result that comes from the father's failure to love his girl how she so desperately needs. Putting it in limerick form is an excellent touch, because the limerick's inherently humorous tone contrasts with the poem's topic in a way that is stark and further emphasizes sadness of the piece.
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Nice One
Quite a good limerick a little crude perhaps but not withstanding it rhymes
well a little puzzled by the word retry Zach possibly because I'm English
Best Wishes..........George.....
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I have to admit the Irish in me totally fails at the Limerick. I have never completed one. This one is blunt irony and excellent, wish I hsd written it.
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What an excelent Limerick I have not tried to write one of these yet, but I think you have just imspired me. My Hats off to you Zach I much enjoyed reading this quite brutal Limerick. lol
Bill
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Outstanding
I thought this was edgy with quite an ironic statement about society today. I haven't read a limerick of yours before. This shows a great sense of humor and flows exactly as a limerick should do. A pleasure to read.
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i like it
well done
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This is a really good Limerick. A Much more serious topic than I'm used to seeing in this form, but hey, who says limericks have to be funny. You've got the .. what is it, meter? well whatever makes it sing, down perfect. Great job Zach.
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clever ryme
I really dig this one! very clever! Good write my man! Bravo!
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I have not read a limerick for so long. This was a great one to remind me of their charm... a meaningful theme and yet...... it still invoked a chuckle.
Well done.
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Very well written
A very good write, and rather unique. I think you have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
AHAHAHHA!! Brilliant Zach. you rock
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hahahahah, thank you
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