So a dino named Bill went to ski,
but he found that he couldn't quite see
but without out any skill
he fell down the hill
and cried straight to the lodge to drink tea.
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- Monster Limericks!! Contest by refinnej.
550 points, ended November 10, 22 entries
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Wow~
This is Great~ I don't Believe I have ever tried a Limerick
but this has Inspired me~
A Beauty this is had me chuckling at the last line
Now sadly he fell down the hill
but Heck...he got tea right
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Voice my Friend
Best wishes in the contest~
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is cute and funny!!!
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Cute, my son was like but i cant have tea! haha. he loves dinos!!
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Fun, cute write here. My only minor critique was that you started both the second and third lines with "but" which felt a tad awkward reading. Just a though, but maybe consider
something like this (just a thought.)
A dino named Bill went to ski,
And few were excited as he
but without out any skill
he fell down the hill
and cried straight to the lodge to drink tea.
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thank you very much for your critique.
You're quite right, and I do rather like your corrections . . .
as soon as I have a spare moment, I think I shall update!
Thank you. Best wishes,
Z.Estel -
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Glad I can be of help!!
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Awww this is cute!
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awe, thankies
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