Wasting in the sands of time and inside
the hourglass that never awakes, the
shadow of death overlooks the love but
no life that's being shared in the desert.
Everlasting miracles wish upon a shooting star...
Twisted in death, twisted with their
lifeless forms consumed with rolling sands.
Thus a picture has been formed, a beautiful
painting with no life but it represents it.
The life of love never ends in this everlasting memory...
Hurt over and over again, but love never
dies into oblivious and painless silence.
Millions lie awake, never going asleep,
because they want someone with them.
Deep inside, they yearn internally but the wish fades...
They scream for desire, to someone they
don't know, for something that can't hear.
It exists only in death, but will someone finally
see the miracle death shall bring in the end?
Love lives on, for it can be a heartfelt lust that no one can deny of power...
Love lives in the everlasting...
Author notes
Contest picture and quote=INSPIRATION!!!
A contest entry
- BluesMans Soul Muse Contest # 1 by BluesMan.
1750 points, ends December 11, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
I want criticism please. Constructive would be great.
Comments
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simply beautiful and I very much enjoyed your poem, I love the way you took this prompt and my favorite part was
Twisted in death, twisted with their
lifeless forms consumed with rolling sands.
Thus a picture has been formed, a beautiful
painting with no life but it represents it.
I wish you much luck in the contest and a beautiful night xoxo
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Love lives on, for it can be a heartfelt lust that no one can deny of power...
i absolutely love that part! it tells exactly how love works & the pain we put ourselfs through for those we love.
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Oh wow!
Hurt over and over again, but love never
dies into oblivious and painless silence.
Millions lie awake, never going asleep,
because they want someone with them.
Deep inside, they yearn internally but the wish fades...
I really loved these lines, but this was an excellent write. I loved it all! Good luck in the contest!
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