In his mind the sight of her in the meadow
wearing a silly hat and an orange dress
takes his thoughts out of the shadow
In his mind the sight of her in the meadow
A mind in verses that only to her may show
words he hides and only her eyes will caress
In his mind the sight of her in the meadow
wearing a silly hat and an orange dress
Author notes
a JFTJOF, non entry, you know the drill 
A contest entry
- The Very Prestigious & Fashionable To Be Seen Entering, "Drink Moxie..." Group Contest (Members Only) by Yemassee.
1212 points, ended November 13, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The secret is out. I'm the girl. What can I say, I set his heart on fire...right after I set his car on fire...then I set the meadow on fire. We now have picnics in the parking lot. I'm still trying to figure out a way to set that on fire.
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this is lovely..an image to linger in the mind for the evening..though the girl may go through a wide array of hats before the right silly hat comes to view.
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I saw Yem's girl out in the field
she's a real looker.
lol...joking I know there is some secret inside joke to this that I'm not privy to, so I'll just lagh. Thanks for entering in the contest.
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''She'' does have a nice belly!
No real inside joke. Maybe a small one or two, I just have written some poems about meadows and such over the years.
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this poems makes me nosy lol...a silly hat (adorned with so many flowers?) and an orange dress hmmm very Moxie hehe
I like the sunshine that it gives
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Ah, yes, the mind confined
within the realm of the head,
opened by the insight of the meadow
from on who knows so well the key to the mind.
Beautiful and insightful,
M-C
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This is quite a beautiful poem gaze. There is an overall softness about it.
What stands out the most for me is that you chose to use the word "mind" instead of "head". There's a difference in my opinion. What's truly inside someone's mind is up close and personal and a true piece of it, I don't think is revealed let alone given lightly.
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I agree, but is shared with close friends, and that is why I have inside information, too bad he isn't in the stock market
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as a poem, a triolet form, it is expressive far beyond expectations for a simple and short poem, that is the beauty of it, simple words, open words; by the effects of themes and changes create ideas and gives the reader a chance to know how r=the writer thinks, sees things...excellent, creative use of the form...h
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Ah the meadow poem. There are other poems and stories about the meadow too, and there was one written a long time ago that started it. Not sure you ever read that one. It's become symbolic of so many things in my life. Well, one thing, different avenues.
It's a beautiful poem, one I'd expect from someone who knows me. Stop doing that. I like being a mystery.
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And star my comment, I only have 101 points.
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I need a silly hat. It comes in handy when I'm out at night, down in the old Port section of town, doing my thing that I do. It needs to be flame retardant.
I'm sure if Yem were judging he'd give you the gold, which of course is easy to say when he knows he's not doing the judging.
You should vote so that I could win because I know you'd vote for mine, right? We're such old friends of 10 minutes.
Flora Burns, PyroMom
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