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She's Lonely If you Cannot Tell

She's lonely,
if you cannot tell,
She crys,
but nobody hears her.


She's lonely,
Her eyes are sollen,
her heart is bleak,
Won't somebody save her.


She's lonely,
She cannot speak,
Cause she has forgotten,
How to find her voise.


She's lonely,
In this dark space,
She's been forgotten,
and she don't know why.


She's lonely,
She trys to find the light,
but doesent,
Poor lonely girl,


She's lonely,
If you cannot tell,
Her heart is broken,
And she cannot be saved.

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  • Fallen-Thumper gold member
    November 8

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    thank you for entering

    A really great piece and very relatable, a sad piece but beautriful in a sense if you get me. Good luck and thanks for entering!
    -penguin-

  • Prince Alex
    November 3
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    Sup!!!! I loved this poem it's so sad and wonderful at the same time!!!! keep it up!!!!