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Accept It

Caustic black gloss mingles with bright ether, struggling to become free
As a chemical rainbow skitters across a puddle of oil on the soil.
(Move and the colours move with you)

Rising factory chemical clouds are lit by the moon's rays above.
Acrid, wonderful yellow shades softly ascend high,
   
                                                                                                free

Both sublimely beautiful,
Don't try to deny it;
Please,
Don't let this moment dissipate.


And between these two?

You.

Between nature and artifice, you forge the link.
                                          you are the link.

You teach Us to accept it,





The inexorable beauty of destruction.

Author notes

Not sure how to go about your contest.

I did recently go over my previous stuffs as you suggest cos I was showing them to someone else. I have come back to writing from a while of being on hiatus. Maybe that means something to you.

Anyway, nice to meet you and hope you like thissun!

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Comments

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  • amnouup
    November 11

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    Great

    Its a great write with wonderful metaphors
    best wishes,
    Mou


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    November 4
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    Oh, oh, oh!
    Back with a slither of color,
    enhanced chemical hues,
    battling nature,
    celebrating hiatus!!!

    Great to see you back!

    M-C


    • Mr Id
      November 4

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      Oh, thank you dearest friend!

      For the excellent poetic comment and for your general presence. Your comment summarises so succinctly my triumphant return.

      It is lovely to be back, 'specially with such a warm welcome. And how are you, m' lovely? How do you do?

      X


      • Aesthete2000 gold member
        November 4

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        So good to read your words!!!!

        I'm cruising along--hah!--more like finding
        creative solutions to keep on going!!!

        Writing, drawing, having fun!
        Counting blessings near and far!!

        M-C


  • marandah gold member
    November 3

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    I like this too

    It was a great prompt and I felt a rich parallel between yours and my take on it.

    A pleasure to meet you


    • Mr Id
      November 3
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      Hm, yeah I agree come to think of it!

      Nice to meet you too!

      I shall take a deep perusal of your work soon I hope!

      <3


  • Tallullah
    November 3

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    Wow, I love this.
    I haven't time to comment properly at the moment, but I'll just say I loved the rawness of this and the structure style. It's a free structure. :} Love the vocab too, and

    "The inexorable beauty of destruction"

    Is actually brilliant.

    Me likes. Clap Clap.

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