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Knocking!

They say the soul is in control -
Within the written verse.
I find sometimes that when it rhymes
My poems become perverse.

The poetry that’s deep in me
Just waits to be released.
It may be sad, or even bad
A muse can be a beast.

A tiny knock just might unlock
The feeling of neglect.
Yet with a frown I write it down
To save my self-respect.

Insanity, impiety,
Bipolar feelings too -
And when I hear that knock I fear
My soul was overdue.

So if you heed these things you read
You may not be quite sane.
Because my soul has lost control;
I wrote this short quatrain.

 

 

 

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Quote prompt:
"I listen to the knock from my soul.
It pushes me to put my feelings in poems." - Meles Niguse

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  • Lacer
    November 16
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    This made me smile a little bit because it is so true! Awesome right! Very creative and cute.


  • NotQuiteElle
    November 14
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    I normally don't like rhyming (mostly because it's a pain in a butt to write) but this was awesome, I really enjoyed it. (:

  • Namelesshero77
    November 13
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    i love how it rhymes


  • Celestial Geyser
    November 13
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    beautifully penned. your style of words is magical.


  • rudysbaby
    November 13
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    nice

    this was so good i wish i could wright like dat


  • Akeem words
    November 12
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    that poem was sick. i loved how it just flow with the rhyme and the meaning of it was just awesome in every way. good poem. just keep on writing I'd like to hear more of your work.


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    November 12
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    On top with the comments of popularity..
    I can read why!!!

    Loved the fast rhyme, the smile it brings and the note within...

    A trophy proves me being right..
    XXJeannette


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 12
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    you are like a beam of bright orange sunlight...I could just soak you up!
    Another joy to read, darling
    Love, Sis


  • manatee
    November 12
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    Knock Out Poem

    Congratulations on the silver. Much deserved. -The Manatee


  • as3384
    November 12
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    awsome...poems
    i love it...


  • The Rivaling Mimic
    November 12
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    Beautiful. I loved the words you chose as they sure created a mood that connects with your reader. Loved it!

    The Rivaling Mimic


  • Tzipora
    November 11
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    They say the soul is in control -
    Within the written verse.
    I find sometimes that when it rhymes
    My poems become perverse.

    - i love beginning of this, it was very well written. Congrats on your silver trophy this was well deserved.

  • SweetGurl19
    November 11
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    Love it, very quirky and unique.

  • mkff90
    November 11
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    A very pleasurable reading.... thank you.

  • AlwaysMe1145
    November 11
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    extremely fun

    almosts like dr suess! That was so fun to read.... U definately have skill! Bravo!

  • Sally Plumb
    November 11
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    I'm bi-polar, too,so I understand very well your writing.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 11
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    Superb Plus +

    I like your wry sense of humor in regards to the Creative Process.
    You certainly expressed your thoughts quite well with excellent imagery; rhythm, and rhyme. Thanks for sharing.

  • Mr Rocky
    November 11
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    To loose control
    Of your poor soul
    Is really quite a bane
    But I think you've
    Stayed in the groove
    And wrought with might and main
    And as every wordsmith realy aught
    You've given your readers pause for thought.

  • Mary Ann Love
    November 11
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    I , like many others, like the line about your muse of poetry being a beast. Thought you might be interested in a poem called The Thought Fox by British poet Ted Hughes (who was Poet Laureate a while back). His muse is .as the title suggests is a fox.


  • ElectricStarrySkies
    November 11
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    this is such a good interpretation of the prompt! I really love this poem. It is well delivered to get the point across and yet despite the simplicity of the structure, it still manages to be serious and powerful. Well Done


  • Haygood gold member
    November 11
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    That is a great take on the prompt.

    You can almost hear the evil laugh behind this one. I really like the rhythm of this poem and the abcb is perfect for it. The second stanza is my favorite;
    The poetry that’s deep in me
    Just waits to be released.
    It may be sad, or even bad
    A muse can be a beast.
    Sounds like some of my poems..
    You did a great job on this (as always)
    Write on!


  • Howard Manser gold member
    November 11
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    Wonderful Rhyme

    "The poetry that’s deep in me
    Just waits to be released.
    It may be sad, or even bad
    A muse can be a beast."

    I do so love it when the belly of the beast is growling with hunger. Howard


  • Pillow Poetess
    November 11
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    Nice tight rhyming

    Well done. It takes a lot of effort to make the form effortless. This is splendid and even better when read out loud.


  • PerVirtuous
    November 11
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    It has legs. I'm not a big fan of people who go around saying what they are not big fans of. Maybe there is something wrong with me but I think it simply reeks of runaway egotism. I am a big fan of this poem because it is very clever and humorously deals with a very deep and disturbing subject matter. Bravo.


  • kylekush
    November 11
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    nice it had a good rythm, im not a huge fan of rhyming poems but atleast that was done well

  • olutomy
    November 10
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    The poem was started will a sentence which shows some kind of disbelive,the poet says that "they say" this statement show that the have been hearing this statement day in day out but he never belive,or once belived but had stored beliving. The poem also started with a kind of suspense ,it said "they says the sole is in control",we need to know in control of what? The second statement "within the written verse "give more meaning to the first verse, it shows that the poet is writting some thing which need his full concentration ,the third line "when it rhymes my poem become perverse"now show what the poet was talking about in the other lines ,if thought that his poem becomes unacceptable when it rhymes. But the other lines shows the poet was not feeling good,he got a lot of sad and bad poems in him ,this put some sense to what he said at the first line"they says the soul is in control"it shows that the soul control the thought ,his soul is sad so is his poem.he is going through a hard time that is why he wrote the poem to cool him self ,and this show in his poem.


  • ProudMomma
    November 10
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    this is wonderful i really enjoyed reading this!! good luck in the contest


  • Nineteen
    November 10
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    Love it, absolutely! The meter reminds me of Emily Dickinson, and I love the internal rhyme in the line, "A tiny knock just might unlock."

    Great work


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    November 10
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    Love it! Enjoyed the rhyme and the flow immensely!

  • Confounded
    November 10
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    Real and honest

    powerful & true


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 10
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    love this! and oh so true.....
    you hit the nail on  the head with this one♥

    becca


  • joliemere
    November 10
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    Breathtaking poem. You really have to read it aloud to get the full effect. "The poetry thats deep in me, just waits to be released" . This is too true for all of us. Everyone has something to say if they just search within themselves. There are many times my soul has lost control when I have begun to write. We sometimes lose ourselves in our writing. Wonderful write and best of luck in this contest!!


  • fiona8 silver member
    November 10
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    Fun poem. Rhyming can be perverse, as you say. Yours is spot on.
    Losing the soul to poetry.... Enjoyed.


  • Heavenlyfate
    November 10
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    Great poem.
    Loveed it!


  • Jet City Woman
    November 10
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    Oh, wow! I really liked this! I read this outloud to get the full effect. Very nice rhyme! I hope you do great in the contest, good luck!!!

    xoxo
    KJ

  • Chris D
    November 10
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    Well done

    A really nice piece.

    Chris


  • awannabepoet
    November 10
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    Once again I see the poet from the read, you see it is not the words per se that make the poet for only that which is unlocked by the slightest of knocks spills verse to move the heart.

    Lovely poem my dear Amera, always looking forward to my next fix of your poetry.


  • WithinYourEyes
    November 10
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    "The poetry that’s deep in me
    Just waits to be released.
    It may be sad, or even bad
    A muse can be a beast."

    I love how you point out that sometimes the poetry we just have to write down might not always be the best, but it's important that we listen to that knock and write it down anyways.

  • Still Anonymous
    November 10
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    A little weird, yes, but I like it. Nice rhyming, too!


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 10
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    A delightful, light verse. And, it speaks of something every poet and poet wannabe has encountered so often. Bravo!


  • Desire gold member
    November 10
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    Wow~

    Is there anything You can't do~
    Holy Smokes~
    Witty with Humor~ and I have yet to try this form
    but You have given me good reason to give a whirl...
    First stanza~ had me rolling
    then so on and so on


    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful
    Thank You for sharing Your Mind
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Ani Grace
    November 10
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    (si...giggle...gh)

    Mind boggling talent...
    I've never felt a giggle interrupt a sigh before.
    = )


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 10
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    Love it!!

    You always amaze with your inspirational muse's beautiful poetry... Thank you for sharing this incredible quatrain. I'm wishing you all the best in the contest, and pen on, Ms. Poet!!
    Peace Always,
    Cyn


  • azlyn gold member
    November 10
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    How very true...such a poetic way of describing the mystical unpredictable being we know as our Muse!

    I enjoyed this very much!

    Write on and on and on!!!



    Az


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 10
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    Oh indeed no poet can be sane!

    I need to look at your work as I am in need of a muse today! And what is hiding beind the magic door? INSPIRATION!!

    I love your work and I truly had fun reading this Quatrain !!

    All the best in the contest! You surely kicked some dirt here!!

    Take care
    Becks
    ♥♥♥


  • blueyez
    November 10
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    knock knock knocking lol this reminded me of the one I just wrote You do rhyme like no other


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 10
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    the story..

    of my life! i feel you on this 100% my friend, outstanding, flawless as i expect whenever you pen something!


  • A m b r e a
    November 10
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    haha this is cute. I have felt that knock too! just now I sat up in bed to write something that was knocking at my brain. And it really won't stop knocking until you answer!

  • James Holdaway
    November 10
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    Excellent.

    someone's been at the rhyme soup again. This is my style of poetry. I must learn how you do it. The rhythm bounces along. Well done.

  • whisperer
    November 9
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    i really liked it, very thought provoking.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    November 9
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    I never thought of it as a "knock", but yes, indeed that muse can be quite forceful! I love the gentle rhymes here and the descriptions are perfect. Lita


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 9
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    OH, so true, so true.
    This fulfills the prompt quote beautifully. Made me chuckle and shake my head in agreement.


  • JustSam
    November 9
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    good job! I like the way the poem is written, and i especially like line 11. WELL DONE! thanks 4 sharing!
    ~Sam~

  • oneheartstring
    November 9
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    dark and cute. terrific!

  • BrokenPossessions
    November 9
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    good rhyming this is great..


  • PoeticPashun
    November 9
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    I absolutely Loved every word.......the rhyme was very free flowing and the words were penned so majestically correct. I really enjoyed your write. Good luck in your contest.


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    November 9
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    Thanks for letting me know I'm not the only one who hears that knock. This is absolutely brilliant. You've just penned an ode to all poets. If I wrote in this comment each line that I liked best I would be writing your poem. Your second stanza above all will remain in my mind for a loooooong time. Good luck in the contest.


  • GotLilt
    November 9
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    Delightful form and rhyme.! Glad you answered the knock


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 9
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    Great take on the prompt! A knock from my soul indeed. Interesting write. Even the Bipolor line fit in quite nicely!

    Good luck in your contest.

    ~Sie


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 9
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    Wow! This is really original! I love the concept and it was beautifully written, thanks for sharing!

    x


  • My Chronos gold member
    November 9
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    Very adorable ...and funny rhyme. It flowed perfectly.


  • karma-n-peace
    November 9
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    Applause! Wonderful poem, thank you for sharing this little rhyme with us.
    It reads great from the first line in the first stanza to the last line of the last stanza.
    Something I fear almost all of us poets relate to LOL.


  • BleedingAngel27
    November 9
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    Absolutely Amazing

    Insanity, impiety,
    Bipolar feelings too -
    And when I hear that knock I fear
    My soul was overdue.

    This was my favourite stanza, the imagery presented was perfect!

    And I adored the final lines:
    Because my soul has lost control;
    I wrote this short quatrain.

    It makes me want to read it again and again!
    Great! Amazing! Superb! I hope to read more from you!


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    November 9
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    Fantastic rhyme hon wonderful write to go with prompt good luck with contest but doubt you need it lol


  • CoffeehouseWriter
    November 9
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    Brilliant

    Absolutley brilliant. I would most definitly agree that this is a quatrian of splendous proportions, which by necessity, is maddening! Kudos to you


  • rollingzen
    November 9
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    The poetry that’s deep in me
    Just waits to be released.
    It may be sad, or even bad
    A muse can be a beast.

  • Eusebius
    November 9
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    Oh, I AM smiling most broadly! A great and pithy penning, and much to the point.

    this stanza is the bestest:

    Insanity, impiety,
    Bipolar feelings too -
    And when I hear that knock I fear
    My soul was overdue.


  • happy kitty kat
    November 9
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    "A tiny knock just might unlock
    The feeling of neglect.
    Yet with a frown I write it down
    To save my self-respect." this was my favorite part it was very very provoking. it made me think a bit more that i normally would lol. i loved the first line the rhyme was very very cool. i love the rhyme in this whole poem too!

  • SuzieJ silver member
    November 9
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    Deeply Delightful

    Can relate so much to your snappy rhyme. Poem's come from deep within me and when one wants out, I have no choice but to find a pen and paper and let my soul do the rest. Thank you for this deeply delightful poem.


  • Legend silver member
    November 7
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    As ever your words light the page and my eyes. Wonderful


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    November 6

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    What can I say what hasn't said before? The rhymes are great and the rhythm is fantastic; it's consistent through this poem.

    I can relate to this poem as even I don't know what crazy idea I'll pen down next.

    Wonderful job!


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 5

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    Amera
    this is so cool, your rhyme is TOPS sss
    just flowin loves it!!

    love and blessings

    Rend

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 5

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    This was sure fun to read. I love the rhyme scheme. It's light and airy ... making me want to write something fun too ... you are an inspiration


  • ZachP gold member
    November 5

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    You have a fun -- yet absolutely brilliant

    take on this prompt -- I absolutely love it

    I agree with PoisonIvy -- I must not be sane either

    I can relate to this all too well


    Best wishes, and good luck in the contest.

    s, Zach Estel. 


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 4

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    i can't control my emotions lately, haven't been able to write, so i know this feeling best, no over anyone, just from what i feel sometimes, i guess you can say that is why i think this is my favor from what i have read this day, i simply love it, keep it flowing, three bunnies should help the knocking for a while (like three seconds if you are lucky)


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 4

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    Great rhyming fun
    I love poetry written purely for the joy of it so this rates top marks

    Jeff

  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 3
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    I fear I find within my mind
    some words I might have missed
    my muse is gone, dusk till dawn
    and I get really pissed

    I understand all too well.
    Great penning.


  • poisonivystar4
    November 3

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    I guess that means I'm not sane!


  • Age of Rain
    November 3
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    I love it. Whimsical and still meaningful.


  • Wandika gold member
    November 3

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    Loved it

    My style so I must always be a bit off too.

    Found this most enjoyable and perfect in form, meter and rhyme.

    Jim

  • LovingPhoenix
    November 3

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    This is wonderful. You are a master at rhyme! Good luck in the contest.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    November 3
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    Greatness is in this write
    This is my first reading of a Triquatrain and love the hell-out-of it
    Being a rhymer, I shall grant you the following..


    Much love..sss..David

    • Amera gold member
      November 3

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      I bet you have heard a Triquatrain before. Remember this?
      Jack and Jill went up a hill
      To fetch a pail of water
      Jack fell down and broke his crown
      And Jill came tumbling after


  • malmadre gold member
    November 3

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    You can just spin them out on a whim, and this one is wonderful. I imagine that you speak rhyme in your everyday conversations, sometimes I do and then think how weird is that, I am not normal. The words "insanity, impiety, bipolar feelings too-" just struck me funny because they are honestly what we have.
    Your muse is not a beast.

    • Amera gold member
      November 3
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      Thanks so much! This poem was fun to write. I do speak in rhyme because I'm not human, I'm a 200 year old elf.


  • Denerica
    November 3

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    Tame the savage beast...lol...this is profound, true about all of our musings, where-ever it comes from. Excellent. Blessings.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 3

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    ~~Insanity, impiety,
    Bipolar feelings too -
    And when I hear that knock I fear
    My soul was overdue.~~o ooo. This is great. I feel like my muse has flew the coop.
    I cant write.
    But you sure can- and write it awesomely.

    Joe

    ~

  • Topnotchsy
    November 3

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    I know exactly what you mean. I find that many of my sadder pieces have come to me at times when I am feeling great, possibly because I have taken a step away and am a bit removed. Nice write.

  • Purrsanthema
    November 3

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    You know it Is funny, funny strange not just funny haha, but I'm really quite different than my muse too, as I suppose all of us are. I find things out about myself writing: sometimes a beautiful phrase comes to me and I wonder where it came from, read it, and didn't know I felt like that or those feeling were in me. It's a process of discovery.

    It's a beautiful little poem!

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