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Paradox Fairytales.

A gentle slumber (Sleep)
Just a little different from the usual (Numb)
Your versions of the truth all covered over (Sugar-Coated)
Your lies spinning, a web of lies forming. (Just Words)
Leaving the last breath basted on my lips. (Unique)

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Another little short one. x]

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  • blueyez
    November 24
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    oooooooo I so loved the last line... basted on my lips... that- is amazing!!!!!!!!!!


  • TroubleInMyMind
    November 20
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    Short but rocks!
    Love the last line


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 16
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    love it...

    you know a lovely
    little words you
    can add to that last
    line...

    Leaving the last breath "basted" on my lips (unique)
    baited would work too.


  • TheSpiralGenerator
    November 4

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    This may be short, but it's actually very nicely written. I really like the imagery that I got from it, and the parenthesized words at the end of each line made it unique. Nice job.

    -Sadien