The poems stand in friendly lines.
I run between them,
adventurous but feeling safe.
The poems are always dependable,
always staunch,
and there's a kindness there.
Even if it were able,
no poem would ever laugh
at itself or at another.
The poems stand in lines
and listen to one another.
A contest entry
- poems are fingers by just mercedes.
800 points, ended November 18, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know what you think of this.
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I liked your poem from the first, the images are wonderful and unique. I enjoy the odd final stanza.
Thank you so much for writing for this contest. -
I like the idea that poems are personified here, "listening to one another."
This is unique!
Excellent
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Hopeful. I'm envious of your comfort. Well done.
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LoL
I beg to differ... I have had a couple poems cuss themselves.
I do believe poems gossip however! Howard
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I like this, especially the last two lines.
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I especially like the concept of a poem beings lines and the writer running between them. Very clever and perceptive! I think you've captured a complex topic in a brilliantly simple way! Love it!
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Judith
Very neat, and somehow re-assuring.
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My poems stand in line as well. Waiting for a bowl of soup and a kind word. The soup is best and most reliable. Good stuff. G
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We needed this!
I really like calm in this poem,
especially what I needed today.
Keep it handy for days like this
to keep all my jitters at bay!
There is a kind of kindness there,
rather rare, a gentle courtesy.
Calming those private jitters away
allowing gentleness to find me.
Thank you.
Terry
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Thank you, Terry. Perhaps it would lacking in civility to say that I'm not as kind as you think. But you made me feel good when you used the word "kindness". I still value it though I don't always use it!
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Very creative thoughts here.
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Well done, sis. Second entry for this contest I've seen. Curious.
Good luck.
Dez
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