Seems like the world is crying today
the rain washed down upon my face
like ice from saturns rings.
...and still I see red in the sky
feels like blood flows endlessly
like a river of sorrows
lost in mankind's morbidity.
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AMAZING !!
Line one-- I thought this today when the rain was absolutely hammering down!! Strange that...
Like Ice from saturn rings... wow what an amazing metaphor there!! Seriously I really think this is one of your best pieces!!
Red sky like blood flowing endlessly-- another great metaphor and amazing imagery
Mankind and society.... yes you seem to be seeing a lot of the morbidity of late... but how can we not when it is all in our faces with the media???
mmmm..... leaves me in deep thought... thankyou for this read, I really enjoyed this xx DD
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wow DD, that is just awesome....
Thank you so much for those amazing words.
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Okay, I give up trying to cheer you up today. Do what you gotta to do - spit it out! Glad these days are less and less lately - I'll continue to pray that It Is So with everyOne.
ya All~Ways,
~ Jan ~
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Hiya Jan, it's just melancholy poetry. I am fine you know, I got friends and a wonderful family even if I have a hard time letting them know they are all that.
got my wife and my two doggies (Zeloh and Casear) those two just go bonkers when daddy gets home.
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