"don't jump"
that are the words
i whant to here the most
insted of
yes yes do it again
will put you back together
youll be croked and twisted
but youll be able to climb
the thosand stairs
and jump again
What did you think
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I feel these emotions everyday it seems. Some things to correct "those are the words I want to hear the most. these to thoses and whant to want. and youll to you'll. Otherwise great emotion and honesty. Good penning!
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The feeling that everyone just wants to see you fail. I have felt this so many times, and yet you expressed it so completely without adding unnecessary words. I love this piece and the emotion it brings, and hope you continue writing. You have a talent, and I don't want to see you fail.
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