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Death

Darkeness roles in
Death wins again
life isnt forever
we will no longer be together

Where is our love going to go
will i still love you, i just dont know
this broken heart will never heal
but you dont know the way i feel

this darkness invades
and my love for you slowly fades
so where will i go from here
because our love will slowly dissapear

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  • KissMeCauseImCrazy
    November 3

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    Bravo!
    Lately, I can relate to this more than I'd like to. It hits home perfectly. And for a poet to be able to make someone feel like u just ripped a piece of what their feeling and shove it onto paper....that's what makes them great

    Sorry if my rambling made no sense...it was indeed a good write!

    Much love and many hugs,
    Taylor.


  • Umi Juvariel
    November 3

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    Great rhyme. This piece was short, but struck just as much of a chord as any longer poem would. Just remember, even though a heart feels like it can never heal, it can. If the love you have for the one that left is no longer ticking within, seal away the hole and try again with someone who does care for you! Excellent write and thank you for sharing!